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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-12-03 08:06 AM


when my eyes were hands
folded into some enchanted dream
and I gave the sand
letter sounds

did the wind listen to the names
plucked ripe from grains
in equidistant
letter sequences

just to be ripples then
on that ocean where I waited
for your breasts
to rise

as my nourishment's horizon
and for the rest of you
to follow obediently
prophesied

as more than a mind's worth love


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1 posted 2004-12-03 08:12 AM


ok you know when you throw the ocean in the mix...I'm gonna love it
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2004-12-03 08:12 AM


Dark,
You could say that. enjoyed

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-12-03 08:48 AM


ohhhh Dark, I can remember feeling this way, when I was young...standing on the shore, looking out into the vastness of the horizon, wondering who and where he was...filled with hope, that he would someday, walk out of that horizon..with the gentle sea winds, reaching for my hand, and forever we'd walk the beaches of live....together....

Guess I read, then, to many romance novels...huh?  Smiles and hugs for this wonderful end of the week writing...enticing and enriching with tons of love.

Tremendous

Sunshine
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4 posted 2004-12-03 08:53 AM



The waves must be heaving
this morning...

they do, in December, you know...


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2004-12-03 09:25 AM


as more than a mind's worth love


a line worth saving~~

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Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2004-12-03 09:27 AM


have always loved the sway of the ocean, and your poem puts me in the mood to feel the sway again....
well done Dark.

Cloud 9
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7 posted 2004-12-03 10:43 AM


Very nice.
vandana
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8 posted 2004-12-03 10:49 AM


enjoyed
passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-12-03 11:06 AM


love it!
Martie
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10 posted 2004-12-03 11:28 AM


DS

"as more than a mind's worth love"

agreeing about this line....the whole poem is wonderful!  


Susan
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11 posted 2004-12-03 01:20 PM


Mmmmmm - D - beautiful - I can see the rise and fall of the waves and the sensuality of this - both in thoughts of the ocean and in thoughts of something deeper -

  Love - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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12 posted 2004-12-03 01:59 PM


your waves continue to break so interestingly
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