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poe
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since 2004-09-06

Posts 180
Heading to China

0 posted 2004-12-03 01:06 AM

It all comes into perspective
The sanding slowy falling down
Who why and when did this come to be
One having to realize in the strangest circumstances
The point fell through long ago
Pain a brush stroke on the canvas of life
The truth is always the same no matter the game
Everyone searching, hoping they will finally find that unattainable thing
The footsteps are all our own
This cricle seems to get smaller with each passing day
Looking into the void
Discussing what is there
When we all wear the same blindfold
It is all done in the name of something
Yet it all stems from this illusion
This one shared delusion
Tears shall fall like the rain
A cosmos to behold
Yet a glass marble is where the mind rests
Do you know you anymore
Or is has the paint become to thick

Tomorrow comes for those who fear it.
Today never ends for those who live it.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-12-03 09:40 AM

fixing the typo at the end would help the flow, Poe, but I did enjoy pondering the thoughts you presented, which now requires a second cup of java for a second read

quatro
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since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

2 posted 2004-12-03 03:09 PM

Nice! This really makes you stop and think.

I know that a lot of poets don't like punctuation, but I feel that I would have understood it a little better with punctuation than without.

quatro

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-12-04 10:58 PM

Very nice write Poe!

~Alli~

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poe
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since 2004-09-06

Posts 180
Heading to China

4 posted 2004-12-08 08:51 PM

Midnitesun, Thank You for your input Midnite, it is muchly appreciated. I usually just write raw. That is why spelling and punctuation are no the greatest. I am just trying to get the thought on the paper.
I am glad that it made you stop and ponder.
quatro, I am glad that it made you stop and think.
*Alli4000*, Thank You Alli.

Tomorrow comes for those who fear it.
Today never ends for those who live it.

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