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1slick_lady
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0 posted 2004-12-02 08:02 PM



Floating Above The Salt


I unsuccessfully wrestled the monster within you
and it is too much to try and tame your heart
you keep measuring me against an unforgiving ruler
and no matter how I inch closer I fall so short
I do find you granted me touch deeper than most
yet in my sorrow I have found a coarse dense stone
time finds scratches did not even start to etch my name
I held my breath dreaming of waters that might change
but in blue I find no future being tied to a sinking rock
even while I find my heart breaking on the waves
it still beats and I refuse to drown submerged in salt


© Copyright 2004 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
MyHeartofShadows
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1 posted 2004-12-02 08:34 PM


I enjoyed this, but am sure I do not comprehend all the meanings.

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2 posted 2004-12-02 10:23 PM


A deep, beautifully written poem.

~Alli~

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3 posted 2004-12-02 10:44 PM


I understand this Helen, and no matter how deep your love might be ... save yourself and move to higher ground. Hugs, Chris
Huan Yi
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4 posted 2004-12-03 02:03 AM


http://www.poetrymagazines.org.uk/magazine/record.asp?id=1936


nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2004-12-03 05:51 AM


but in blue I find no future being tied to a sinking rock....what a line, Helen

Hope you are well

M

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6 posted 2004-12-03 06:50 AM


YOU GO sweetheart!
LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-12-03 07:13 AM


Know the feeling

written with much conviction and a wonton wish to forget...to break the chains of a very passionate love you feel...
amazingly done

Krawdad
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8 posted 2004-12-03 12:54 PM


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seek the fresh water
that comes after the rain

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Cloud 9
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9 posted 2004-12-03 01:55 PM


This reminds me of my husband when we were younger.
JL
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10 posted 2004-12-03 02:48 PM


Very sad, but excellent write.

JL


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11 posted 2004-12-03 07:02 PM


excellent write my friend...

as usual..I leave impressed..

James_A_Fraser
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12 posted 2004-12-04 10:47 AM


The wind that threatens to sink your ship is the very one that moves it fastest.



~~J

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