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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-12-02 08:12 AM



we were water falls entwined
with vapor mingled dance
we saturated our commotion

I savored the samba of your breath
when you spoke to trees
and made the ends of willows

worship the sun of your eye sides
and your turbulent torrent
was the poetry of an amazon frolic

I was the rogues' gallery ruse
of famished panting glances
for the roe spend of your riverain

where reams of rimes we rigored
from our saloon song salacity
then without sacred obligation

you whispered sanctioned satiation

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Dark

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-12-02 08:15 AM



fine, quiet lines, these...
with a hint of wow...

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2 posted 2004-12-02 09:05 AM


"we were water falls entwined
with vapor mingled dance
we saturated our commotion"

lovin this

Susan
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3 posted 2004-12-02 11:05 AM


Mmmmmm - morning Dark - a lovely bathe in words this morning - warm - nice -

  Susan

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Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2004-12-02 11:10 AM


ms sunshine, thanks for your review and warm smile.
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ms SEA, you please me with your selection of images, thank you lady friend.
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ms satin, call me calgone (sp) and let me take you away?  thank you for your presence babe


Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2004-12-02 11:12 AM


"you whispered sanctioned satiation"

I am sure she would, again and again.


"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2004-12-02 11:32 AM


ms susan C.. thank you charming one for your smiles and comments
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7 posted 2004-12-02 12:05 PM


D-
Very beautiful as always.

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2004-12-02 12:13 PM


ms 9, you bless me, as always, and I thank you
Martie
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9 posted 2004-12-02 12:48 PM


DS

It's amazing how you make words sound so good together!  

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2004-12-02 12:49 PM


ms martie
you make them fit so well
with your eyes, thank you lady friend

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11 posted 2004-12-02 06:27 PM


Amazing write...loved it.

~Alli~

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Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2004-12-02 06:31 PM


ms alli....thanks to you ms for your eyes
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