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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Look for the key it is in the lock <<>> What Frog doth this pond hold to its rim? That a tadpole had for its own name: atrium. Filigree paints a trim about the height of naught Whilst the minnow wiggles out a hook have caught. Is this not fallen……………..from the willow? One Might say Tart of spring Doth bring Conjecture Liken to the sweet berry, or lemon-learned sour And if you have read aloud thus far A fairytale you most certainly are. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Fascinating - to read and reread and visualize the shape of the poem itself -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And aren't you magnificent! Don't add an "and if..." for the charge must surely be taken up, and read aloud...and enjoyed even more for the staccato effect of the fluid droplets of each word...the image of the frog, tadpole, each water droplet does indeed make the speaking reader a fairytale unto themselves... and I am sharing THIS one with my grandchildren! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (12-02-2004 01:48 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was uplifting and lotsa fun, as you youself are....  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks Susan, you are so kind! Thanks Sunshine, I bet those grandkids are crazy about you. Hey Ms. Lee J: You flirting with me? You’re making me blush… By the way I checked on the dates and you are very close, it is our 3 year anniversary. It was in October. So thanks for the kiss! JL |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
muahhhh?????????? Nahhhhhh Happy Anniversary Hun! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Love this JL!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
JL...this is excellent. Every word, every image, every single time. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
JL, this was terrific. I really, reallly liked it. I did read it aloud the second time. Just great!  .....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! great presentation! |
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