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Proper good-bye to a long lost lover, since found
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Proper good-bye to a long lost lover, since found |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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(for ‘pumkin’) . . . . An Ash far too thin to have gotten so tall sways in wind that announces a squall, hastens away a few sparrows so small ………I’m amazed that I see them at all The branches, mere twigs that are nearest the sky futilely cleave to their leaves, still they die, autumn bereaves whereas spring will defy ………a season denuded, our fall No doubt you have wondered to what do you owe words of a specter from decades ago, circumspect, guarded, selected as though ………they’d expect or would hope that you’d know I foraged to find you but not for a game, while my seasons decline it wasn’t the aim of a hoary old fool to rekindle a flame ………long doused by the tears of his woe Drawn by the wind now the dark comes this way, conspires the hour to sketch it all grey and I like this bower with little to weigh ………bare what it is I would say…. I’ve solace in news you were able to breed, fate lay not barren your womb for a deed viewed then as despairing but one now I read ………as your path from my disarray I sense too your tension that I will not share the hard road I chose, the pain that I wear, it’s not from pretension I take you not there ………again it is you that I spare For I took the trail that led through the rain, the darker of forests, the longest of chains, embracing tornados and hurricanes ………and what man seeks comfort there? Please know for a time I did stand in the sun, basked in the joy of three daughters, a son emitted an aura from which coy wouldn’t run ………but those days have since been undone These words were not written for some pity’s sake more a confession that in hindsight’s wake yours was a love whose loss even now aches ………keep this or join those who shun At times unknown reasons cause us to forsake love, so like seasons which both make and break, but for me to give is for me to take ………I go now my rain has begun [This message has been edited by RSWells (12-01-2004 05:05 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richard I feel like I say these words so often about your poetry...so I'm sorry if I'm repeating myself...but this is very touching and very well done!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
An honest outpouring of feelings. Extremely well written..and deeply felt I am sure. Heart hugs~Nancy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I sense too your tension that I will not share the hard road I chose, the pain that I wear, it’s not from pretension I take you not there ………again it is you that I spare For I took the trail that led through the rain, the darker of forests, the longest of chains, embracing tornados and hurricanes ………and what man seeks comfort there? Please know for a time I did stand in the sun, basked in the joy of three daughters, a son emitted an aura from which coy wouldn’t run ………but those days have since been undone These words were not written for some pity’s sake more a confession that in hindsight’s wake yours was a love whose loss even now aches ………keep this or join those who shun ==================================== sometimes we need to write these for ourselves as much as the other person. Outstanding rhyme scheme and cadence here Richard... pure poetry read aloud.... and the humilty of the emote is touching. Well done poet sir. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the most beautiful things that one can ever write is something that comes from the heart.. you sir, have a beautiful heart. This touched me. HUGS The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Richard, a tender write of heartbeat heard loud and clear. But who can say one way or the other, perhaps, she might have chosen to travel with you on rocky roads? |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
To go through life and not make amends in some way is not a life... This brings forth both love, respect, acceptance of self, but mostly the apology, and a chance of forgiveness... In a world that is far too short on time, you just penned an everlasting gift. Thank you, Sir. |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Excellent write concerining that subject, your words seem to come so easy to you, and you are correct, I am too young. I appreciate the words, they give me some direction. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautifully honest Richard, and I do hope you sent it. Janet Marie is so right, that sometimes we just have to write these for ourselves. However, this one shows a need to reach its destination.  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Quite touching - heartfelt - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what form and rhyme! excellent! very powerful! |
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