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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-11-30 07:21 PM

Strange skin fevered
I grow grays
sallow parchment curling edge
breaking fine veined time
and I
have had enough today.

I closed the book and cracked the spine
watching wonderdust in fly
sparkle dervish in the sun's
last laugh of this evening's sign--

An omen at the end of day
wishing I had never seen -
the light diminishing is stone
weights in press upon this plank
that holds my history
of lack...

My chest is barreling implode.

A song
that never knew the words
a keening dirge with filagree
notation that I've never heard
yet rocked me in my sweat of sheets.

Tomorrow comes again and I
dread the surety, good night
wraps me in the cloak of it
self around my finger twirled
as I regret the wakenings,
that I could remain a girl
and never know the damning eye
of another day of light.

"Goodnight, good Night"
eyes died. They closed.

"goodnight" I sighed,
and shivered in
the comfort of my dreams
again
like a baby quivering
in sleep
there's no remembering
forgetting that life lies.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2004-11-30 07:27 PM

damn woman....

:: hugs::

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2004-11-30 07:31 PM

oh damn K....
hugs....heart hugs....

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-11-30 07:34 PM

always something to be gained from a read of yours...

love ya Karen.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-11-30 08:06 PM

this is so sad - lonely - aching

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

5 posted 2004-11-30 08:13 PM

Karen

You give off so much light...even though it's dark of night!! Heart hugs.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

6 posted 2004-11-30 08:18 PM

Damn, Dang and FM!

this aches

sigh

Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2004-11-30 09:15 PM

Hey Girlie...
The truth of grays...they are really silver trimmings...and dawn is always first gold...like you.
TD

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2004-11-30 09:18 PM

A song
that never knew the words
a keening dirge with filagree
notation that I've never heard

~*~

I've been told I could not possibly be
a writer if I lower myself to base
adjectives...

but damn...

IWIHWT

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

9 posted 2004-12-01 01:35 AM

I'd like to thank you all for your kindness, and especially you, Kari, for the 'base adjectives' reference.

I appreciate the honesty, and can't possibly think of a better exit for me--

"base adjectives"

*shaking my head*

unless it is, "like my luve," a red, red, rose,
I'm sure I've no idea.

You guys have fun.

and thanks, for the joy and encouragement.

Love to all.

IWYHWT

*chuckle*

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2004-12-02 01:24 PM

Strange skin fevered
I grow grays
sallow parchment curling edge
breaking fine veined time
and I
have had enough today.

I closed the book and cracked the spine
watching wonderdust in fly
sparkle dervish in the sun's
last laugh of this evening's sign--

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

baby..for lines like that?
I'll become a base adjective.

YOUR RHYMES ROCK!!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2004-12-02 01:35 PM

Well ...just damn Karen!

redheart angrybraids
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honolulu, hawaii

12 posted 2005-01-06 05:51 AM

we poetic pirates keep our selves captive to find our deepest treasures and then as a true wild womyn we dazzle and amaze the rest of the world with our findings, as they were with us through-out the journey.

that is what i am feeling and i send my love and care to my dear poet sister. who always amazes me with deep real words.

kidnly
redheart angrybraids

redheart angrybraids
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honolulu, hawaii

13 posted 2005-01-06 05:52 AM

Strange skin fevered
I grow grays
sallow parchment curling edge
breaking fine veined time

beautiful and intense

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

14 posted 2005-01-06 08:50 AM

yeah, what everyone else said, and then some
absolute art and Masterful....amazing you are

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

15 posted 2005-01-06 02:57 PM

Amelia, amelia, smiling wide here.

I miss you my friend, and you are just such a lovely soul, that I wish I could capture your sweetness in a portrait.

Hugs dear friend,

Have a wonderful new year.

and Lee? I was just about to write you to thank you personally for all of the wonderful gracious replies you have left for me, but since I have no e mail address for you, I'll say it here:

thank you

and Happy Reading folks.

I appreciate your generosity very much.

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

16 posted 2005-01-06 10:43 PM

I could go on about how great this one is...
and everything I said would be true.
And yet, I think this one
needs a more focused reply, and so
here...

...There.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

17 posted 2005-01-06 10:50 PM

"A song
that never knew the words
a keening dirge with filagree
notation that I've never heard
yet rocked me in my sweat of sheets."

...uh-huh!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

18 posted 2005-01-07 05:27 AM

that last line...
sigh

I wish I could

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

19 posted 2005-01-12 09:29 PM

Karen,
As always, I am stunned, but, for a change I think I finally realize why. To me, it is your ability to transform words into images that draws like few I have come across. Hope all is well.
Doc

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

20 posted 2005-01-12 09:43 PM

Read this four times now, Karen. Brilliant writing, as always. Wonderdust....sparkle dervish....sun laughing --- pulled me right there. Happy 2005, Karen, sincerely.

....jo

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

21 posted 2005-01-12 09:44 PM

Hey Doc...

I'm fine lovie...and thank you for caring enough to ask.

(He's a doll, ain't he?)

and thanks to all.

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

22 posted 2005-01-12 10:16 PM

SB, wonderful poem. Heh every one has gray hair. Kinda like my gray eyelash. I think its bueatiful. Sometimes I play with my gray eye lash just cause.... ok I am wierd but anyways....

Juju

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

23 posted 2005-01-12 10:37 PM

Your words always insist on leaving me in awe.
luv you lady, Chrislane

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

24 posted 2005-01-12 10:41 PM

damn...

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

25 posted 2005-01-13 01:17 AM

""goodnight" I sighed,
and shivered in
the comfort of my dreams
again
like a baby quivering
in sleep
there's no remembering
forgetting that life lies."

.
Ouch!

JL

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