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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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the river she grew too big to rub her ripples on the side where the bank turned over some porcelain moonlight she was pale tremulous frosted with the glass of soft mouth water slippery handfuls overflowed the shadow man told her stories about her fingers in the mud and how she made the roots grow, about the woman water's calling that made her feel oceans distant were her body close and shudder song skies were her only sister's twin she found new sides then for her bath shape boundaries and danced for the shadowman with her fingers in the soft she said the suckle mud was his heart _______________ Dark |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the river she grew too big to rub her ripples on the side where the bank turned over some porcelain moonlight she was pale tremulous frosted with the glass of soft mouth water slippery handfuls overflowed ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ that made her feel oceans distant were her body close and shudder song skies were her only sister's twin ============================== Im going to pretend you wrote this one for me and then keep it in me mothy library.... that made her feel oceans distant were her body close *sigh* ................ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JM? I think he did... and he should do it more often! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, she is a very lucky lady to have your eyes....gifted souls you will together be...tremendous write...bro! Thank you for sharing your care words with an amazing touch of awareness....you shine and so does your heart! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms jm...please bless me with your offer of saving my humble scribble...may it warm you my lady friend ____________________ ms sun, thank you for your visit, stay longer if you have time __________________ ms lee j, thank you little lady friend, for your eyes and your wishes...this river belongs to another god, but I do spend daydream nights there at her shoreline |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well.. the title drew me in... and the words drew me deeper into thoughts of my own... made me think of the river I call the blue.. and how she floods at times..and is always changing... well done sir.. very well done... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Cpat...of truth I would think sir that you would recognize the azure of her...they are lovely our rivers, thank you my friend |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Could drown in this one - love the current that flows just beneath the surface - damn - D - yummie -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
come swim me my satin open my shoreline with your willing water love thanks babe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms janet...you do capture her in such a lovely light thanks lady friend |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Your power to gather the masses and speak to each one in a whisper, softly caressing with breath the skin just below the ear..is surpassed by none... We all pretend it's for us.."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms susan c, she is a long river... perhaps she is there at everyone's eye sides thanks lil lady for the pleasure of your visits |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
how lovely is that... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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