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Hold Me Lands |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Night comes in second hands Two clouds part, making separate rain In tell tale cold the particles complain Sullen and silent glides the moon And always the waters rise in compromise Full to burst against the sky reaching high Wanting Sorrowful oh weeping willow Boughs the stillness of a good cry That cannot pour enough to empty Sobbing and soulful just wisp to the wind Nothing responds as the universe thinned In a flat line, just a thread fine, just a thread Said Curling in to a pin drop, as the sound Falls in droplets, each a spot lets the ground Golden brown frames the wishes poured down That the velvet of new day could deliver a new way Given in orange smile, squirt and randy the while Brought together chalk pictures in vibrant mixtures Paints As clearness love will taint with tears And part the heart in lightning fears Two clouds that played skies marmalade And sad the missing part of left unmade Night comes in second hands To wrap me tight in hold me lands Of you Copyright Kkh 11/30/04 |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh such sadness emanating from every verse. Reads like a novel’s middle. Needing the beginning and a conclusion: “As clearness love will taint with tears And part the heart in lightning fears Two clouds that played skies marmalade And sad the missing part of left unmade Night comes in second hands To wrap me tight in hold me lands Of you” Beautiful!! JL |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh how I love this one just my style! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Yes, I agree with JL wholeheartidly... but...the ending, especially the very last line...astounding...I loved this so much Incredible write! As clearness love will taint with tears And part the heart in lightning fears Two clouds that played skies marmalade And sad the missing part of left unmade Night comes in second hands To wrap me tight in hold me lands Of you Wow! That last line speaks for itself...and you have written a composition of great wealth! Thank you for sharing. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"As clearness love will taint with tears And part the heart in lightning fears Two clouds that played skies marmalade And sad the missing part of left unmade Night comes in second hands To wrap me tight in hold me lands Of you" Ouststanding!!  clearly in need of a bump!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
And sad the missing part of left unmade Night comes in second hands To wrap me tight in hold me lands Of you nature has its way of soothing somehow when we find those hold me lands within its open arms for us beautiful and just sighful bliss |
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