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marcel
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0 posted 2004-11-28 02:38 AM



Betrayal

Petals from roses, drop one by one
When the warmth of the sun betrays;
Similar are the loving lips of a man,
That can corrupt the most beautiful of flowers.

Marcel

© Copyright 2004 keith marcel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-11-28 02:42 AM


oooooh..... lovely!
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2 posted 2004-11-28 05:10 AM


damn good write
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3 posted 2004-11-28 07:41 AM


Ah Keith...a lot implied with very few words!
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4 posted 2004-11-28 09:24 AM


Oh I love the way your wrote this Keith.
The risk is always there, but so too is the very sun that nourishes the rose.

Smiles,
TD

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5 posted 2004-11-28 02:41 PM


Short, but amazing!

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6 posted 2004-11-30 02:19 PM


To the point.

Great write

JL


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