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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2004-11-28 02:21 AM


Behind my eyes framed in a dream
a beautiful illusionary sketch
created by the power of one
unseen but present in love
holds my adoring stare
till I myself seem as a dream
on this platform of compacted dust.

Corners, no corners, to turn different ways
and I’m drawn to horizons blurred and unclear
yet there to be seen in my wish to be
your breath of desire and will to survive.

The frame is of gold like the colour of soul
imbedded with gems of personality traits
to further enhance my determined stance
to remain a devotee of all I see, feel.

Stand with me here next to my dream;
can you see in the sky the blue of my eyes
with no blink or flutter, no looking askew,
from what a heart needs to be real?  

Now I lay me down to sleep.
If I should die before I awake
know deft is the hand of the creator
who draws from soul the intrinsic truth
and paints such a beautiful sketch
known to me to not simply be  
a one-time illusionary dream.

Don’t wake me up; I’m sleeping to be
the lady you see in your dreams!


© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
RSWells
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1 posted 2004-11-28 02:26 AM


Only a fool would rouse you. I heard this as a rhyme though it isn't, such was the flow. Enjoyed
Honeybunch
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2 posted 2004-11-28 04:08 AM


RSWells - Thanks for the read.  So in my sleep I now reply, "the rhythm of awareness touches base but just can't rhyme or align in harmony with the norms and forms of this reality."  

passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-11-28 05:17 AM


love that ending!
Martie
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4 posted 2004-11-28 11:51 AM


Helen

As always, your writing captures me.  You are such a lovely and loving person!  

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2004-11-28 11:59 AM


Wonderful write Helen.
TD

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2004-11-28 12:17 PM


"Stand with me here next to my dream;
can you see in the sky the blue of my eyes
with no blink or flutter, no looking askew,
from what a heart needs to be real?  

Now I lay me down to sleep.
If I should die before I awake
know deft is the hand of the creator
who draws from soul the intrinsic truth
and paints such a beautiful sketch
known to me to not simply be  
a one-time illusionary dream"

Forgive me for quoting so much, but there was something about those two stanzas that touched me.  Very well done!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2004-11-28 12:19 PM


Thanks Dixie, Martie, and TD, for your kind responses.  I seem to have written far too much so today is a clearing day in preparation for ... well, I sure don't know - not yet at any rate.  
Honeybunch
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8 posted 2004-11-28 12:22 PM


Susan - thank you! You have paid me a high compliment and I am grateful.
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