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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2004-11-26 04:26 PM



Out on the night street
there is music—
Something
not quite Spanish
thrills the air

The town
pretends
to go wild
on liberty weekends
Ruby’s dressed
in gaudy red . . . .
and looking taller than she is

Beer
and shots
youthfully ignorant arguments
about love . . . and the nature of God

Amber lights
in shabby restaurants
A wash of stars
above it all



© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-11-26 06:39 PM


I can picture this...

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2 posted 2004-11-26 09:13 PM


nicely written john...enjoyed~

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passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-11-27 08:03 AM


yeah! what a picture
DavePage
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4 posted 2004-11-27 01:55 PM


Very good - wondered about the title.

Lance Corporal is an early promotion often broken back to the lower level.

Trying to live between a rock and a hard place with no thanks from anyone.

Been there, done it, failed, and came back to lose the next one up.

Interesting.

Dave

Kevo
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5 posted 2004-11-29 12:20 PM


Yes, Yes, Yes...the live of a Lance Corporal.  I lived it as a PFC, a Lance Corporal, A Corporal, and a Sergeant.  Hey, wait a minute!  You have delivered a summary of the single Marine from Private to Sgt Major/Master Guns.  Well done!  Of course, your imagery suggests, to me anyway, of my even wilder life in Okinawa with the FMF.

Warm regards to you.

In solidarity,

Kevin
Sgt USMC 1988 - 1996 (Having lived the life of a LCPL the entire way - Shame on me!)

LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-11-29 10:17 AM


Enjoyed the extended visuals...very well done
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