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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-11-25 02:11 PM


A bit contrived but I felt like doing in three bits to it.

Dave
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That was a morning as my face
Warned eyebrows
To embrace
Four foot across
Parting was there
Looking enamel bossed
But it was my own hair

My arms outstretched holding a wall
Caressing my face
Tugging and pulled
As I juggled around the dripping noise
Buffalo herds were seriously disturbed

I managed to get the broom in my mouth
Only brush I could find
Without a shout
For my teeth to go around

Bent my head
To match my mouth
Pole was difficult
But it went around
And tiptoed down
To a carpet hell
Across a chair
And breakfast aire
Spoon vibrating to the soul
As I disappeared
Down some hole

Matched by fabled milk
I swear
Raised from goats
For my wife’s rare
Complexion and the oats
A good cleanser
Worth a fortune
In any direction

Sprinkled my wife as chilly words
Like a knife
Attacked the herd
With machine gun poise
Vibrating skull with piecing noise
Tongue at least still hanging out
As the shouting died about

Conscience thought was overheard
Penetrating, as it ought
No point in hammering his brain
No rhyme, reason or thought

Still it must have looked funny
And there was the honey
As it dripped off the walls
To match the cereal
And my call

Of kitchen needs redecorating

But will the bank think so
Is what I'm aching


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Susan
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1 posted 2004-11-26 10:22 PM


Grin - enjoyed your trilogy -

Susan

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ethome
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2 posted 2004-11-27 01:05 AM


Dave
I didn't understand much of this but the trip I went on while reading it was delightful.
Good luck with the bank and try not to disturb the Buffalo herds.


Eric

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3 posted 2004-11-27 01:24 AM


Enjoyed very much Dave!

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DavePage
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4 posted 2004-11-27 12:51 PM


Thanks

Laying it on thick is all I can say about writing this.

The buffalo stampede was how my head felt one day.

I remember a guy I also met who said to me "I didn't need a toothbrush this morning, I needed a broom".

I can also remember staying over and I freely I admit, I needed a beer before we cleaned up after the party.

regards

Dave

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