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portrait of a woman bruised |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Here the bang forth prophecy: she was crippled some degree bent in ways that charcoal broke and eraser bled the knead begging to be bread her man tapping storms a nervous leg was the tell that told his bluff I muttered to myself enough I shuddered, thinking fisticuffs shadows in the bend of her artist eye of frank observe gulleys dug her hollow stare underneath her eyes compared a contrast of her innocence-- purple lending hue to blue lavender in light, I knew the rivers that she'd wept and I shook my head, remembering... |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Wow what a memory jogger. I went through abuse but not like my mom did. You jogged memories of her and my dad. My stomach is in knots. very touching. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Needed saying Dave |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Sad elegance. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hugging you! It is eyes that have been there that understand.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Seymour said it best... m'ladyMxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sleepless is the torture of unlove. TD |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
..... hug |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An excellent piece of work lady, and thanks, the steam works! Yeah! |
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~eternal child~ Junior Member
since 2004-11-23
Posts 31 |
sadness ~ec~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a contrast of her innocence-- purple lending hue to blue lavender in light, I knew the rivers that she'd wept and I pretty colors that arent pretty when theyre worn on a woman's body so sorry this had to been written at all  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sometimes we see things we don't wanna see. Every now and then, it is someone else who gives us eyes to see what we'd been blind to... thank you I've got angels.   (vilya....)  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
to the core Karen.... cutting deeply... yes, I to have seen through others eyes... sometimes it is, quite painful. gawd girl, you are sooo good. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You have the tender eye in this write... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
heartbreaking spill, serenity..... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a contrast of her innocence-- purple lending hue to blue lavender in light, I knew the rivers that she'd wept ============================= poetic poignancy baby....you write the blacks and blues "beautiful" ykikyk  "this medium is over taken by keyboard prophets who believe their every word profound." |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah lady...there are those 'remembers' that are just like a gut punch...you write it perfectly...and that in itself is sad...that it continues in the life of another and another....sigh... |
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