navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #34 » The Vision
Open Poetry #34
Post A Reply Post New Topic The Vision Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2004-11-23 07:28 AM


The past is a reprimand drenching potential firmness
Summer broods
There is something pompous in the wind
Producing friction-like egotism
Slapping my face, this way and that…
Wham, wham, wham….
Terrified textures with a sniper’s mood
Explosive…..knot of refusals
Telling what minds are capable of?

Cold warriors, recoiling feelings with
Fairytale feminist holding a giant hand
Mother Teresa beauty, eating stones
Prone to automatic characteristics
Some would say
Her hubby walked on water
Ghoulish imagination to concoct?
Thematic matters of theme parks
Hard around the edges
Invisible cities, are a train of thought?

Two minds become first hand knowledge
Where gold ingots are garbage
Drinking from an angelic chalice
Pretty poems grow complicated
With overlays torqued!
Jesters shaking bells or’r the earth
Fools spit aloud, their shinning crown of manhood

Emphasizing a work in progress
Lives the knights…
Finding a new meaning to “Brick of the City”
She is, perhaps more then a book?
A vagrant breeze? I think not!
This so called prostitute
Denied flight?
Recounting fate, gender
By clerics, who plucked her feathers!
But the buds have blown, snapping an echo

Things are dying!
Pointing to traditionalists
Whose prize becomes a fish?
Blame is a growing town
Populated by people who need to get out
Mannerisms become whores
Atrocities
Deep in mud, crawling all over, glued to cloth
With an ancient photographers trick
An artist, genius, who painted himself
Inventing clocks…
What was he hiding?
Camelot’s secret?

Unnamable activities board a flight for the moon
Suffering post-partum syndrome
Seeking light therapy systems
Triggering the cycle
With drop dead sufferers
Fostering Brain Fog
Which is more then a deficit disorder

Whatever couches the mind
Inside this hazy threshold
An incantation wails
Splitting the fish
Defining their loss
Or perhaps baroque directness of voice?
Was comprehension used in good effort?
To scribe the dead sea scrolls?
What was playing hide and seek
Who was the holy grail?

Channeling a fire storm
Growing tongues
The food chain plays a one-liner
Like a dog sniffing someone’s crouch
Elements oozing into rivers
In third world chapbooks
Become ensnarled by a semi Mack truck
Moving names and sweet meats
Into touch wearing lies
While the baby talks, talks, talks
About a world wide delineate element
Consistent with winsome intimacy
Internal and erratic
Turning into nature
Not yet born
Hiding Holy Blood


© Copyright 2004 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

1 posted 2004-11-23 07:43 AM


Your poetry never fails to amaze Lee, i would love to offer you a proper critique, but your poetry conundrums prevent me from doing so without looking at a book of words and finding your sharp incisive mind, i will get back to you..thank you for now...

Goldenrose.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2004-11-23 08:23 AM


LeeJ
You discribe the face of change.
From inside looking out.
In that it must be very strange
The other way I really doubt.
Good morning sweet.

Shelley
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263
Ohio, USA
3 posted 2004-11-23 10:03 AM


this is some world eh?

I really love the images you portray here.
Kinda scarey, but such is the world.

Nice

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
4 posted 2004-11-23 12:34 PM


"Two minds become first hand knowledge
Where gold ingots are garbage
Drinking from an angelic chalice
Pretty poems grow complicated
With overlays torqued!
Jesters shaking bells or’r the earth
Fools spit aloud, their shinning crown of manhood"


Powerful!
Enjoyed very much Lee J.

JL


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #34 » The Vision

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary