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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-11-23 06:35 AM



In My Words to Yours

Within the falling of the leaves
there are bits of bloom
reminding me that the sun does shine
even if hidden behind the clouds.

As the silent mist creeps in
to allow for the cool hug of November,
I am in solitary sit
holding in my empty hands,
thoughts filled with your essence.

Olden fears enter the darkness
following the trail...of words.
Loving those lost to love,
even if not belonging to me.


"I lay down,
Deeper than I ever stood,
Lost to love."


Stretching time,
existing for the now,
celled by the silence
of the pale read brick walls
I await...

Someone to touch, to not be alone
Actions to fill this, my solitary home.

M


*with a bit of thought borrowing*




"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-11-23 06:38 AM


thought borrowing...

sounds good coming from your pen.

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

2 posted 2004-11-23 06:53 AM


Well wriiten but sadness surfaces too...there are people at pip that will talk...and express thoughts...thank you..

Goldenrose.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-11-23 07:38 AM


Tremendous write....vivid and harrowing
pulled me in and wouldn't let go

Very well done!


Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-11-23 08:06 AM


Someone to touch, to not be alone

yes! Nice to read you

Maree

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-11-23 12:22 PM


Excellent way of expressing your thoughts M.
Enjoyed the read and sending big hugs.

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
6 posted 2004-11-23 12:57 PM


I agree with all above!  Excellent write.

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

7 posted 2004-11-23 05:44 PM


Sounds like from the heart

Good words

Dave

Dautz Write
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since 2004-11-16
Posts 96

8 posted 2004-11-23 06:02 PM


"Loving those lost to love"

sort of has a poetic ring to it, alliterative to say the least

I enjoy your writing.  Hope you know
you have a lot of friends here

Dautz

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
9 posted 2004-11-23 07:20 PM


you are beautiful
and the sun does shine

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