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An Afternoon With a Prayer
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An Afternoon With a Prayer |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Falling just beneath the Core of still Grasping hold of the back of my shirt Bringing me to surface Retrieving my life, like a swing partner Touching flesh of cheek With mouth to mouth A little pale Dry…squirming in your arms With hopelessly chubby lovable Bloated and bewildered You give courage like a drink Vanishing construction zones Deliberate long arms With a 2 mile an hour crawl Heart so endless, it Carries a wide load sign I’ve never known happy like yours Like a rich kids home Filled with regular folks Morphining my shattered soul Smoothing my eye shadow Placing me in a sleeveless black dinner dress You sit next to me, not across Like so many do Enthusiasm speaks like an excited volunteer I draw long straw Take deep breaths The weird thing is….you order, anyway Never asking…simply knowing Didn’t matter to me what we ate Your company kicked butt Bringing me flowers for the last month Like a child waiting for a red light Waiter brings our food You divide both plates evenly between us Just so we can both savor the blend It was an automatic impulse Without mask You weren’t the kind of guy Who would take a girl bungee jumping a 75 ft. cliff With a 60 foot chord I slouched at first, to appear shorter But you knew? Didn’t you? As if pondering some great riddle You slowly raised your eyebrow And our eyes met Stopping to ponder each other You said it was ok to be taller You didn’t mind Thunder roared in the background But you kindly turned down the speakers Wearing Golden Gloves While peeling off the 3 year awkward weights From around my neck You asked if I’d enjoy sailing a catamaran. Knowing how to bring the child out of the corner With one hand lost in my hair Intimately like it was our secret “Sheesh”….you pressed two fingers slowly on my mouth Blushing I asked while settling closer ”May I breathe in the want of you”? “Yes” you replied, while turning down the glow Of the red numbers on the clock “I know the cost of this secret” and winked a smile That promised nothing but friendship…. Smiling, I wondered, where we’d be 25 years from now You said, you were a one-woman-network As if reading my mind… Your eyes returning light I tried to speak You placed your finger in the corner of my mouth Tracing the word happy on my rough skin I asked if you’d walk with me for a while You smiled saying softly “Some day, I may fan your mornings into a glow” [This message has been edited by LeeJ (11-18-2004 10:22 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"”May I breathe in the want of you”? “Yes” you replied, while turning down the glow Of the red numbers on the clock “I know the cost of this secret” and winked a smile That promised nothing but friendship…." loved this part  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
"Retrieving my life, like a swing partner" I'll try not to steal this. "morphining"...I love it when we take poetic license and invent a new word....I do it too seldom “Some day, I may fan your mornings into a glow” Great ending to this blush of new love write. Sometimes a last line comes to mind first and I wonder if that was the case here. Enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gawd I love this Lee.... LOVE the way you write lady... with style and class!! Hugs YOU! ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I love the smile I see in the words here Lee....very well done. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ I could feel the hushed excitment all over this lovely!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice Lee J. Beautiful poetry! JL |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You know LeeJ, This was about as perfect and sweet a summer drive as any I have ever known. Smiling at you. Excellent. TD |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
you have a distinct style, taking snipits of life each with their own descriptive phrases..then you piece it to fit a picture of reality..that may be crude or ugly but its terribly sincere  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Luscious flow of words...reminded me of a moment this morning when my girlfriend said "give me a smile"...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As usual, struck speechless. There seemed to be one line that didn't fit... but I didn't care. The rest of it was simply an afternoon with a prayer... and He sure delivered! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like the first rush of a new love; loved the textures and flavors throughout |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is incredible - loved every line - every emotion - excellent - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so many thoughts, excellent! I always enjoy the parts of your life that you share |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Moments tender and delightfully personal, but told with reserve, a formality and respect from a time when these things were commonplace and lost now to behaviour intrusively forward...thank you for these beautiful frames Lee... Goldenrose. |
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