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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2004-11-18 09:48 AM


It had rested covered in the corner
since that day he saw the reflection
of everything he had never   wanted
to see.

Still, it was there staring steadily
at him through silent moments.
Guilt had greeted him that morning
and he had trembled with regret,
then lashing out in anger;
collapsing in anguish.

That was then,
    this is now
and time
ever constant, had given him
grace of forgiveness
along with a fading
of         yesterdays memories.

He fingered the faded fabric
feeling the emotions of that day,
the sheet, still soft to the touch.
Yes, years had granted him grace
but there lingered the fleeting moments
that would make his mind recall
the stir of echoes;
seconds filled with his burden of shame
as sounds of internal screams
and glass shattering,
ripped through the    silence

Years had passed
and time had healed wounds.
He was alone now, she who had
stayed with faithfulness and forgiveness
had long ago been taken from this world.
This room of memories had
remained unvisited since then.
Its pull had been urging him,
saying, it is time.

    Yes, time.

He reached, uncovering the
broken shards of glass
no longer afraid
of the reflection
they held….



The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....




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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-11-18 10:08 AM


Gentle,
A good understanding write, enjoyed.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-11-18 10:08 AM


Yes, years had granted him grace
but there lingered the fleeting moments
that would make his mind recall
the stir of echoes;
sounds of screams
and glass shattering
in seconds
filled with his own  shame.

~*~

A very thoughtful, well written write of
one man's anguish over things he could not
change, once he let his own demons loose.

Excellent!

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-11-18 10:25 AM


It is grace that give to us, yielding a wanting heart of change to tear open the sky
forgiving self forgives all...if one can want enough....
Tremendous and fabulous write, enjoyed this one girl!!!!

Thank you for sharing.

Enchantress
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4 posted 2004-11-18 10:28 AM


A most excellent and thought provoking write Donna!
Well done!
Hugs~Nancy

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

SEA
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5 posted 2004-11-18 11:04 AM


touches the heart this does.... well done
RSWells
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6 posted 2004-11-18 11:19 AM


Good portrait of long held, heavy regret. Time wins in the end and one wonders if your character ever learned that covering the mirror denies ever another honest reflection or that attempting to shatter the shame seen there only divides the pain into mean little slivers that needle endlessly. Enjoyed
Martie
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7 posted 2004-11-18 12:05 PM


Well done, Donna...I have to agree with Richard because he said it so well.  
JL
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8 posted 2004-11-18 12:19 PM


Beautiful poem, just beautiful!

JL


Susan
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9 posted 2004-11-18 01:14 PM


This reached out and touched me - I cannto find the word I am looking for so I shall just have to say - as always - I enjoyed this-

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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10 posted 2004-11-20 08:28 AM


GentleSpiritedOne~
You are penning some magnificent poetry~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2004-11-20 09:20 AM


you have found some wonderful inspiration lately

I'm enjoying

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2004-11-20 05:11 PM


Wow, fabulous writing Donna, Thank you.

Enjoyed.

Maree

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2004-11-22 08:31 AM


Each of you grace me with your comments and kindness!  Thank you so much

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

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