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Martie
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0 posted 2004-11-17 09:19 PM


The Space Between

There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room

It holds me there on darkened plane
against a breath so clear
that I can feel the silken touch
of millions of loving years

The place is pealed by laughter
and glittered by lullaby
and it rocks a memories cradle
and it drinks the hurt from sigh

It is filled with music’s silence
and the peace of holding hands
the calm of ocean floating
and the strength of a golden band

There’s a light in the air tonight
and the path it takes is clear
its way is starlit dreaming
that has turned away dark fear

There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room
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A repost

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2004-11-17 09:22 PM


I love this Martie:
The measurement by heartbeats of happiness, in it's infinite wisdom.
Glad you posted again.
TD

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2 posted 2004-11-17 09:26 PM


Martie,  I enjoyed this,  the flow of the
words,  the pictures that fell from the
page to my eyes.  All of it,  it is a very
good poem...thanx for sharing it again with
those of us who may have never been able
to see it the first time.

jwesley
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3 posted 2004-11-17 09:28 PM


Enjoyed the wholed thing but really loved the opening ( and closing) stanza.

jimmy

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4 posted 2004-11-19 11:08 AM


Sometimes light doesn't matter because our eyes are so blasted by the brightness that we can't open them....and sometimes what we think is silence, is really our own ears shutting down, overloaded by the din that surrounds us.

Sometimes we feel alone in the way that cold water feels hot on frostbitten skin....not because it is a truth felt, but only because of a change in the way our spirits define loneliness.

The good news is, it can go both ways. Dim can seem bright, silence alive with sound, and solitude can be good company.

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5 posted 2004-11-19 11:11 AM


Beautiful post Martie.
I'm pleased you reposted as I don't recall reading this before.
Excellent...love it.
Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

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6 posted 2004-11-19 11:12 AM


I did not see this before either Martie...oh dang, is this every beautiful gal!
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7 posted 2004-11-19 11:22 AM



Magic...
you weave magic...



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8 posted 2004-11-19 11:35 AM


Martie,
There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room

A delight to read.

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9 posted 2004-11-19 11:36 AM


hugs my friend....
wanted you to know i read..and appreciated this..


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10 posted 2004-11-19 11:37 AM


ms martie
that chill in the air kind of night
those are my favorite kind
makes one sit closer to the other
and hide things under blanket thoghts

enjoyed this ms

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11 posted 2004-11-19 12:20 PM


Well you took darkness, chill and even solitude and made them embrace you. Well done.
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12 posted 2004-11-19 12:50 PM


Well now, I must say I am most happy you reposted this...I missed it before, of this I'm certain. Lovely ethereal feel to it, with a buoyant rhythm to energize.

One constructive critique, I think you mean "memory's cradle" rather than "memories cradle." Let me know, please, if I need to reconsider that idea...perhaps you mean a cradle of memories rather than a cradle belonging to one's memory. If so, I need to read that section with a different eye.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Martie
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13 posted 2004-11-19 12:57 PM


Virginia...hi!  Thanks for asking..yes, I meant a cradle full of memories, but actually, it could be the other meaning as well.  Thanks all for considering this poem again.  
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14 posted 2004-11-19 01:03 PM


"There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room"

I sure can relate to this.  A lovely poem, martie - such rhythm.

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15 posted 2004-11-19 02:18 PM


nice piece
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16 posted 2004-11-19 02:37 PM


I know of this silence ~ and the spaces.

Martie, you touch me deeply with every stroke of your poetic pen.

Love & Light Everlasting,
Linda

jwesley
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17 posted 2004-11-19 02:53 PM


Second time around I really have no favorite part...it's All wonderful.

jwesley

JL
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18 posted 2004-11-19 02:56 PM


Very, very nice write!
Enjoyed.

JL


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19 posted 2004-11-19 05:17 PM


Smiling here, you're beautiful m'friend and so is this poem.

Glad you reposted.

Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

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20 posted 2004-11-19 05:22 PM


Martie--

This was one of the most beautiful pieces of poetry I've read in a long time--it moved me! I am glad I got to see this one, I missed it the first time around.
Take care,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

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21 posted 2004-11-20 10:16 AM


"...against a breath so clear
that I can feel the silken touch
of millions of loving years"

Marvelous!

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22 posted 2004-11-21 09:41 AM


you make words move inside a person and paint pictues and feelings on their heart Martie - this is great - Paul
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23 posted 2004-11-21 10:26 AM


There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room


your words always make me sigh...
hugs
M

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24 posted 2004-11-21 11:41 AM


*sigh* This piece is beautiful Martie!!

~Alli~

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