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Suetang
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0 posted 2004-11-16 08:49 PM



Picture by Alan Ayers

* * *

There was a time we were oblivious
To almost everything but love
I bloomed when in your presence
How we fit like hand in glove

You were the words to my music
Our hearts sang in perfect tune
Your love was all I lived for
How easily you made me swoon

But you also loved another
Now my heart has lost its voice
At the end of your performance
You'd already made your choice

Now I sit amongst love's ruins
Wondering where our love went wrong
We once made such beautiful music
But how very sad now was the song

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

© Copyright 2004 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
Shelley
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1 posted 2004-11-16 08:59 PM


you had me swaying to the music!
This is wonderful.

Well as wonderful as wonderful can be "sitting amongst love's ruins"

I need I hug after reading this one.

Suetang
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2 posted 2004-11-16 09:10 PM


Shelley

I am so very grateful for your comment.  I must confess that this was pure fiction.

Take care..........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2004-11-17 01:10 AM


Whether you pen it happy or sad, about emotions or nature, or even when you are giving us a bit of history ... you always write it beautifully and it is a treat.
Goldenrose
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4 posted 2004-11-17 06:41 AM


Your words of love be it fiction or otherwise are always worth reading Sue..thank you..

Goldenrose.

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-11-17 09:06 AM


Such a beautiful bittersweet write Sue.
Always always a pleasure to read.
Hugs~Nancy

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

Paul Wilson
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6 posted 2004-11-19 12:52 PM


Sue... Sadly touching and so realistic. I really hope that this tender hurting piece is only fictional. I always enjoy reading you so much...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

~DreamChild~
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7 posted 2004-11-19 01:10 AM


A melody indeed.
ethome
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8 posted 2004-11-19 04:37 AM


Beautiful bluesy words and images Sue.

I like the song tie in.


Eric

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9 posted 2004-11-19 10:24 AM


such a melancholy beauty Sue, well done. good to see you.
passing shadows
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10 posted 2004-11-20 02:36 PM


oh my
SPIRIT
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11 posted 2004-11-20 03:02 PM


Loved this - super read - thank you.
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12 posted 2004-11-20 03:04 PM


What a beautiful poem this is, Sue....
bittersweet.
Hugs,

JL
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13 posted 2004-11-20 03:56 PM


Soooo very nice.  Great poem!

JL


DavePage
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14 posted 2004-11-20 04:16 PM


Sue

Loved your words

Dave

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15 posted 2004-11-20 06:21 PM


BEAUTIFUL!!! I love this!!

~Alli~

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Suetang
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16 posted 2004-11-20 09:43 PM


I am indebted to all of you for so many wonderful comments.  I'm so glad you all liked my words.

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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