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Balcony . . .

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Huan Yi
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So then . . .
a dream

The synonymous
small place
of solitude
upon a hill

congruently deep
in the common forest
beside a body
of usual water
identically lost
to an invariant world

constant mist
among similar trees
clouds
above
familiar stars

the same
slender willow
with wheat colored hair

those pale blue eyes
the need for love


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passing shadows
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nice imagery here
Dautz Write
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Especially liked the title of this--it ties it all together.  The need of congruence, of a soul mate, perhaps?  Enjoyed

              Dautz
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Beautiful write..much enjoyed.

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

~DreamChild~
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does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle?
Huan Yi
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Thanks to everyone so far

DreamChild,

“does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle?”

I don’t think it unique.  I suspect it is derivative from
my reading of other poets.  

John

Susan Caldwell
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John,

Superb writing..I very much enjoyed.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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nice, the imagery is striking
Huan Yi
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Thanks Everyone

This thing was a response to:

A Balcony in the Forest
by Julien Graeq
ISBN: 1860462944
Drauntz
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many of your poems are in response to a painting, books, poems of others, history even or other play, wich part of reality life you would like to write?
 
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