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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

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Waukegan

0 posted 2004-11-16 07:43 PM

So then . . .
a dream

The synonymous
small place
of solitude
upon a hill

congruently deep
in the common forest
beside a body
of usual water
identically lost
to an invariant world

constant mist
among similar trees
clouds
above
familiar stars

the same
slender willow
with wheat colored hair

those pale blue eyes
the need for love

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2004-11-16 08:43 PM

nice imagery here

Dautz Write
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since 2004-11-16

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2 posted 2004-11-16 09:55 PM

Especially liked the title of this--it ties it all together. The need of congruence, of a soul mate, perhaps? Enjoyed

Dautz

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-11-16 09:59 PM

Beautiful write..much enjoyed.

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me ~

~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

4 posted 2004-11-16 11:16 PM

does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle?

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

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Waukegan

5 posted 2004-11-17 12:17 PM

Thanks to everyone so far

DreamChild,

“does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle?”

I don’t think it unique. I suspect it is derivative from
my reading of other poets.

John

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2004-11-17 09:43 AM

John,

Superb writing..I very much enjoyed.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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7 posted 2004-12-07 03:05 PM

nice, the imagery is striking

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

8 posted 2004-12-08 01:05 AM

Thanks Everyone

This thing was a response to:

A Balcony in the Forest
by Julien Graeq
ISBN: 1860462944

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

9 posted 2007-04-28 08:54 PM

many of your poems are in response to a painting, books, poems of others, history even or other play, wich part of reality life you would like to write?

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