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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2004-11-15 09:03 PM

I am...
Waters that rage before the flood bathes.
The shore that casts the waves into the seas.
The light that shimmers upon the lake’s edge.
the tear that glistens an eye.

You are...
The fountain that sprinkles a symphony.
The coo of a mourning dove.
The whisper that calls me.
The moon that bathes my soul.

We are...
Flowers blooming upon the vine.
Wine’s sparkle behind a crystal shell.
A flake of snow, landing lightly upon a lid.
A water’s drip before the fall spills.

I am...
The love that bubbles endlessly.
The rush of cheeks in a roses blush.
The cavern’s silence beneath a starry sky.
An owls cry before the dawn.

And as the day swallows the stars, as comets
trace the pillow of darkness...As mountains
move toward the seas...I am here....
Forever in love...
With you...

WranglrButts9
Member

since 2004-10-24

Posts 108
Iowa, US

1 posted 2004-11-15 10:22 PM

Wow is all I can say! This is absolutely awesome!

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2004-11-15 10:56 PM

What a wonderful write! I'm adding my "Wow".

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2004-11-15 10:57 PM

I kiss the ring of the poet.
Truly beautiful, even in its echo.
TD

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-11-15 10:59 PM

Oh Barry - you are such beauty and your words carry your soul - wonderful dear Sir-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2004-11-16 08:54 AM

I am...
The love that bubbles endlessly.
The rush of cheeks in a roses blush.
The cavern’s silence beneath a starry sky.
An owls cry before the dawn.

And as the day swallows the stars, as comets
trace the pillow of darkness...As mountains
move toward the seas...I am here....
Forever in love...
With you...
==============================

Barry this is just so very lovely...
both in its imagery and emotions...
I love the twist you did on the "I am" theme and took it beyond in a beautiful confession of expression. The sincerety is its centerpiece. Very well done poet sir.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-11-16 08:56 AM

Confession of Expression...
yes, what JM said...
the Moth knows...

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2004-11-16 08:57 AM

Barry, I enjoyed this because it reads softly and most factual in feelings, but to, a heart full of confidence and respect....and if you possess that, your relationship cannot fail.

Tremendous write...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-11-16 09:08 AM

When all the superlatives have been used ..
may I just say, well done poet sir!!!

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me ~

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

9 posted 2004-11-16 09:25 AM

Magnus darling man, now this is exceptional writing, you never fail to touch the hidden depths of me. Delicious writing, you have a huge talent, and I’m always impressed whenever I read your work. The flow and rhythm in this beauty cannot be bettered.

I love it utterly, utterly, utterly

And to think I only popped in to have a quick read not knowing I’d see a gem of wonder.

Excellent writing truly one of your best

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2004-11-16 10:46 AM

All I can say is this: "You most definitely are and she most assuredly must be!"

Linda

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

11 posted 2004-11-16 11:17 AM

Barry,

This is beautiful!!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

12 posted 2004-11-16 01:10 PM

Hi Barry, this brought tears to my eyes. What a fantastic bit of writing from your heart.

hugs, Marti

A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows.
–St. Francis of Assisi

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

13 posted 2004-11-16 03:35 PM

what the moth said...

(chuckling) she says it better than I do most of the time...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2004-11-16 04:50 PM

beautiful

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