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Aimster
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0 posted 2004-11-15 01:32 PM



You crossed my mind today
You lingered there for a moment or two
I wondered how you were
I wish there was something I could do

Everytime I write you a letter
It finds its way to the trash
For I don't want to make a mistake
I fear of doing something rash

You live so far away
You probably no longer think of me
I bet you celebrated the day
That you broke away and became free

I could not blame you
For I know that I caused you pain
If it's any comfort to you
Since our depart I've never been the same

Sure I moved on, I made a place for myself
I even am happy, many see me smile
But today you crossed my mind
You stayed there for a while

The words I'm sorry seem so hollow
They sound empty even to me
But if you could feel the emotion behind those words
If somehow I could make you see

I've twisted myself inside and out over the years
To the same conclusion I have come
The moment I betrayed your trust
The inside of my heart came undone--

If somewhere inside your soul you ever knew me
Then you know these words are true
I'm sorry for all the pain
But I'll never be sorry I met you

AMK
November 15, 2004



"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

[This message has been edited by Aimster (11-15-2004 02:40 PM).]

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-11-15 03:00 PM


Aimster
A delightful read, enjoyed.

LeeJ
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2 posted 2004-11-15 03:13 PM


The words I'm sorry seem so hollow
They sound empty even to me
But if you could feel the emotion behind those words
If somehow I could make you see


ohhh my, surely know these words well, and sometimes no matter what you do, you can never go back...the emotional roller coaster was way to disasterous...

A very from the heart write....

stevebrklynnyc
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3 posted 2004-11-15 04:04 PM


You live so far away
You probably no longer think of me
I bet you celebrated the day
That you broke away and became free

That part of your poem is priceless for me.  This read lifted my spirits, thanks.  Steve.

Cloud 9
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4 posted 2004-11-15 04:43 PM


amister

I was writing something like that because this just happened today.

Yours is great.


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5 posted 2004-11-15 07:00 PM


Amy,  this is a precious expression.  So
profound and sincere.  Well done!

ParisGrl
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6 posted 2004-11-15 10:41 PM


Amy,

Hey girlie!  I thought you fell off the face of the earth.  its good to hear from you again.  Great poem.  I hope all is going well for you.  If you would like you may e-mail sometime.

~Laura~

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2004-11-15 11:00 PM


Hi Amy~  You not only crossed my mind, but you read it, as I've been thinking of you.  Your poem is beautiful and sincere.  I don't think there is one among us who have wished we could take things back, we are human beings after all, and we are far from perfect.

Hugs sweetie~

Susan
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8 posted 2004-11-15 11:01 PM


Much feeling well expressed and understood -

Susan

Jamie
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9 posted 2004-11-15 11:18 PM


quote:
Sure I moved on, I made a place for myself
I even am happy, many see me smile
But today you crossed my mind
You stayed there for a while


glad to see this

:J

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10 posted 2004-11-16 12:29 PM


Amy, what a tender heart write, hope the intended reader gets this message.
Aimster
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11 posted 2004-11-16 07:51 AM


Thank you all for your always beautiful replies. I just wanted to say I have missed you all as well, and it's good to write now and again. This poem was just about someone who I hurt a long time ago, but it still bothers me. I'm in a very great relationship with Bonnie, but there are moments when I am still upset with hurting for someone I once cared so deeply about. She knows who she is

Hugs,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

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12 posted 2004-11-16 09:01 AM


Amy darling ‘lil sis oh my I feel the pain within this, forgive yourself darling one, you know she does I’m certain of it. What you had was very special, what you have with Bonnie is even better. (Because its founded on reality, not living in a fantasy and somewhere else).

As always your writing is exceptional darling one, take care of you and always remember you are so very special

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy


Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

maddy
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13 posted 2004-11-16 01:40 PM


Excellant write Aims.
duckysgirl
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14 posted 2004-11-16 02:42 PM


Don't worry Amy, she has gone on with her life and is very happy with someone else now. Someone who is honest and would never lie or cheat on her. A woman who taught her that she could trust again. Just remember Amy, what goes around...comes around!!! Hope this makes you think a little!!

Duckysgirl

JL
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15 posted 2004-11-16 03:21 PM


"The moment I betrayed your trust
The inside of my heart came undone--"

Yeah... I know this one well.
Heartfelt sadness.

JL



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16 posted 2004-11-16 03:25 PM


AHH Amy, hugs. Heartfelt writing.
Aimster
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17 posted 2004-11-16 03:50 PM


I don't know what to say to you Duckys girl. I am left speechless. If you know my situation and the person I'm speaking of, then I'm even more shocked. But to be so cruel as to write it out loud like you have, that flat out flabergasts me, but each of us is allowed their own opinion. I am not proud of what I did, but there was an emotional rollercoaster on both of our sides. I'm a changed person now and trust me I learned the biggest lesson of my life and my heart broke into a million pieces more than once because of it. Thank you for your insight though.

Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

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18 posted 2004-11-16 05:59 PM


Amy,
this is such a heartfelt write...
I am sorry the person Ducky's girl thinks she needs to be so mean. It's just uncalled for. I do know the situation, and I know your heart....don't let her get to you Amy. She clearly does not know you at all. Her loss.


duckysgirl
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19 posted 2004-11-17 11:02 AM


I know the situation better than you may think!! My reply might have seemed a bit harsh, but let's just say...I know what this person went through...and it wasn't pretty!!

Duckysgirl

Aimster
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20 posted 2004-11-17 01:21 PM


And neither was what I went through...you know there is always two sides to every story. I openly admit I was wrong, I felt horrible, and I'm not making excuses. But also in my defense try being in love with a person for over a year and then realise they are never going to tell their parents the truth, you are never going to fit into their life, have them basically throw a ring back at your face, not to mention have them drive 17 hours to see you and then only being able to stay for one night because their mother called and then leaving you in tears...talk about hurt. like i said two sides to every story. all i wanted to do was write a poem to express my feelings, and I saw no harm in that. I have been a member in here for over four years and those who know me, know me very well...i'm human i made a mistake...jena knows that i'm sorry deep in her heart she knows i once loved her, but i moved on, i suggest we all do. that's all.

Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

duckysgirl
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21 posted 2004-11-17 02:09 PM


Looks to me like nothing has changed at all!!
Words are just words...your actions are what speak the loudest.

Aimster
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22 posted 2004-11-17 02:21 PM


duckysgirl,

just let it go...you're acting childish now. i said i made a mistake, i apologized, i no longer speak to her she no longer speaks to me (the way she wanted) i respected every wish she ever asked of me, all i did was write a poem, i'm sorry if you can't deal with it, but i'll write how i feel and i don't need yours nor anyones approval, now just let it go. i have been a member in here for four years, i've been through countless heartache, and seen more than most in my short twenty seven years and what i see right now is someone who is acting very childish so just stop. i'm not responding to you anymore. so just stop.

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

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