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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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0 posted 2004-11-15 12:51 PM


Emotions grouping around
We saw what could not move
The wolf and seraph
Sense a dialogue bemused
Encompassing night touching hours
Rests rhetoric
On my breast unfurling sound
of your moist words
To eyes which immortalize
Where fish swim one sphere
Playful lights amplify
Eating our souls pursuing fullness
A peaceful glow, bird of paradise charm
Changing course with daring
Elegant flowers on white sand
We stroll along a blushing wind
Sigh
A blushing world
Hand in hand
Possessing kind summer days
Of sweet sirens drowning, seeking
Pure energy sources join
Heaven smiles with leisure
Upon our inner painted bridges
Where we through off wishes…together, once
Painting Grecian art with sensual trailers
A new found land of river souls
Where the intellect becomes purer
Focus becomes understood
And there we encompass value
For which there was always folds
The taste of mind knit skin
Un-named could have beens
Small boats with oars
Deeply immersed in everyday life
A greater virtue of the individual
Dynamic ever changing
Making copious assent
With sage by our sides
Where ‘we’ came into being


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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-11-15 02:20 PM


LOL...yes, Lee, quite possibly
I did have tea with your amusing
Muse...

Mine refuses to out herself!

[The little flirt is probably
with a himself...don't y'know!]

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
2 posted 2004-11-15 02:23 PM


A blushing world
Hand in hand
Possessing kind summer days
Of sweet sirens drowning, seeking
Pure energy sources join

::like this ::
nice scribe, LeeJ!

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
3 posted 2004-11-15 02:24 PM


"Deeply immersed in everyday life
A greater virtue of the individual
Dynamic ever changing
Making copious assent
With sage by our sides
Where ‘we’ came into being"

Much enjoyed the read this lazy afternon Lee.
Your imagery is awesome lady!
Hugs~Nancy

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

Dautz Write
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since 2004-11-16
Posts 96

4 posted 2004-11-16 03:46 PM


Lots of neat imaginery here.  Especially liked this:

A new found land of river souls
Where the intellect becomes purer
Focus becomes understood
And there we encompass value
For which there was always folds
The taste of mind knit skin

Dautz Write...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2004-11-16 11:58 PM


Nice...James
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2004-11-17 12:53 PM


A new found land of river souls
Where the intellect becomes purer
Focus becomes understood
And there we encompass value
For which there was always folds
***********

This whole piece but especially the above lines prove my point when I say you have a way of seeing the focals of life and bring them to the forefront to share with the world.  You have an understanding and a unique ability to convey such.  It is always a treat to read you words and this one is of course no exception.  Superb AGAIN.

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York
7 posted 2004-11-17 01:01 AM


WOW Leej, I don't read your work often.. but I think I'm going to start. I enjoyed this a lot!

Smile

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

8 posted 2004-11-17 06:44 AM


What i would like to know is do you ever wirte a bad poem?...I have never seen one with my eyes...your choice of words never fails to impress me..that is what makes you unique..thank you..

Goldenrose.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
9 posted 2004-11-17 08:57 AM


Well done Lee!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
10 posted 2004-11-17 12:00 PM


I do agree with all the above, your poetic philosophical mind is pouring out wonderful words in this write.  Good one Lee J.

JL



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