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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2004-11-14 07:26 PM



She toted a water supply
in a copper glass bottle
thought the client was a bit crazy
cause he thought it was wine
that wasn't why he asked to dine....

she served the opened capped bottle
then leaned forward to hear
he didn't know what rules would appear
cause he spoke in a different tongue
that wasn't high on her restaurant rung...


caught unaware of the locale tactics
he thought she was full of antics
so he ordered a coffee to start the night
hadn't sat down to begin a fight
content that she'd eventually serve

a dearth of language set right in
candle light lamp made the table dim
concerned at being misunderstood
he mustered all the courage he could
and asked if she'd accept a visa card
the word Charge-x, caught her off guard

she sauntered away before he could ask
before getting a chance for a next plate order
to fill the gap in communication disorder
tapped the table top until she returned
attracted the waitress's discern
added a soup and a bagel dip plate
the soup came with bread..
order change was too late.




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Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
1 posted 2004-11-14 07:46 PM


A chuckle here, - yes, miscommunication - often even when we speak the same language - enjoyed

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2004-11-14 08:50 PM


Yes, indeed, smiling at the scenario of dim light and glimmering smiles of a waitress who would if only the customer could!  
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