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Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07
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With my darkling

0 posted 2004-11-13 11:37 PM


So basic was the vow I broke
and so complex, the promise spoke
that love sincere, on whispered breath
to young, so shy, a subtle death

so wonder now, one moment real?
or half a life lost, so surreal
It may be only pain you feel
but half your life, in laughter
Keeps it real.

because I remember every day
you made me feel

© Copyright 2004 Jason Lyle - All Rights Reserved
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
1 posted 2004-11-13 11:43 PM


sad -

Susan

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2004-11-14 12:06 PM


OH, Jason
need a big hug?
a well done painful write

Michael
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3 posted 2004-11-14 12:39 PM


wow -- very moving words.  Hope to read more from you.

inkedgoddess
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Ohio
4 posted 2004-11-14 10:56 AM


rhyming's overrated....

your thoughts came thru here very vividly,with feeling, rhyming or rhymeless

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The World of Poetry
5 posted 2004-11-14 03:26 PM




~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

dgvarner
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6 posted 2005-01-18 11:42 AM


sad one...

hugs, g

"Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw)

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
7 posted 2005-01-18 11:52 AM


Jason, the first two lines of this one define it all.  Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2005-01-18 11:55 AM



That just flung me backwards a few years...

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
9 posted 2005-01-18 09:15 PM


too long since last i saw your name up here. wb
passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2005-01-18 09:16 PM


yeah...sigh
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