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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Forbidden Though I can journey amongst hidden trees Capture moss in lay of palm when I please Turn to shadow the warmth of sun in haste Forbidden it seems ... a path to love's taste The eye of touch goes numb to call of wind Between endeavors of true passions blend Broken in spirit to the chains of yesterday On bended knee ... to promise of that day Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem Rise of stem to toast in celebrations dance Behind screens of wonder locked in chance Though I can journey amongst hidden eyes Capture the tears in flow of morning cries Turn to shadow the caress of warming bath Bathed in taunt of desire to yesterday's path Forbidden it seems ... Mark Christopher |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well now, Mark. Each time I read you, I feel like I'm on a guided hike. Like the Native American tracker, you show us the meaning in bent leaves and compressed earth-- a knowledge only experience relates. You are such the talented naturalist writer, love quite evident - I could smell the musk of Mother Earth here. heady in the metaphor lovely in the literal  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem Rise of stem to toast in celebrations dance Behind screens of wonder locked in chance ~*~ serenity said it so well. Thank you for these gifts. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Though I can journey amongst hidden trees Capture moss in lay of palm when I please ~~~~~~~~~~ The eye of touch goes numb to call of wind Between endeavors of true passions blend Broken in spirit to the chains of yesterday On bended knee ... to promise of that day Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Though I can journey amongst hidden eyes Capture the tears in flow of morning cries Turn to shadow the caress of warming bath Bathed in taunt of desire to yesterday's wrath Forbidden it seems ... ==================================== Sometimes things felt while reading are hard to express ... even for a long winded moth. Im finding it difficult to put into words all the places this one takes me. But then you already know... so I'll take the Aquarian path...  Though I can journey amongst hidden trees Capture moss in lay of palm when I please ~~~~~~~~~~ The eye of touch goes numb to call of wind I love those lines...the images, the spirit of them... and the way you used the repetative theme and phrasing in the opening and closing verse...pulling it all together along with the title. As always your poetry is felt from depths for it is written from such. A bittersweet beauty MC. Poetry is emotion put into measure. The emotion comes by nature ... but the measure is acquired by art. Thomas Hardy |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This settles over one like a blanket of warmth right from the earth herself.... I need to wrap up in this one for awhile and come back to it again later to enjoy it's depths. So, if it's ok with you, I will just tuck this into my library and revisit it again soon... and give it a reply worthy of it's beauty! For now, I hope this will do!  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
There is no doubt in the sincerity of the heart made visible within your works Mark. Nor the connection you so easily make with the reader. Can relate very well to the expressions of that restless and searching wind that blows throughout this write...and the hesitation to move beyond what was. Smiling at you. I wish you all there is. TD |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I really like Serenity's reply - and wholeheartedly agree - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoy your sincerity Mark. Such a beautiful bittersweet write. Another of yours to pop into my library. Well done sir. ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, I hear the music of your flute, enjoyed. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Maga~ You know I know ... I always do~  *Huglets* to you~  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You are such a pleasure to read MArk Christopher and such a gift to us all. this goes to my library Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow, Mark! You most certainly have a way with words. I was captivated from start to finish. Absolutely beautiful! Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*sigh* to sip the nectar, but not to quench the thirst; as the forbidden fruit is not always within our reach. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark Not forbidden to find the words to make the charm that captures like you do with this poem. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
mark, you uncover the pool table and it is a god's eye view of the universe way kewl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Karen - I believe that is one of the best if not THE best reply anyone has ever given me and I am humbled by your words. I thank you from the bottom of my heart. Sunshine - Thank you. JM - You know how hard it is for me to stretch to this topic and I admit, a bit different from my norm in certain ways, so I understand the path you took and appreciate you doing so. I remember a time when you wouldn't have been able to do so and you know what I mean by that. The progress you have made on your path is remarkable also. I thank you from the depths of Aquarian silence. Love ya my friend. Gentle Spirit - It will do just fine and I thank you much. TD - As I have no doubt you can relate and know that hesitation quite well also. There is that unspoken understanding that beckons voice as it seeks that warm breeze to float in on, until then, the trust will have to hold the lyrics. Thanking you much and smiling back with the same wish for you. vandana - Thank you dearly. Always nice to see you pop in. Susan - I do thank you dearly. Enchantress - To be in your library is an honor and I thank you. Sy - Thank you for the visit and for not asking for cotton balls. Marge - No doubt here and I thank you much. Maree - And your visits are a gift as well. I do thank you much. Sue - I always enjoy your enthusiastic replies and thank you. Midnitesun - Sometimes there are those reasons we may not know but often time gives us the answers. Martie - As you charm and grace always capture the hearts of many. Thank you my dear friend. Dark - You shoot with a straight eye for sure and I thank you. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Setting you back up in the winds of that cherokee song. A good topic I think...may give it a whirl. Trusting the music. Thank you too. TD |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes, I do know what you mean... TYFGMBTTP...MAL ... LYBMBF you walked in the room & made it feel like time was standing still. I felt fascination...then my heart gave me away. glass tiger |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your insight is so very poetic, and I admire your capability to tug at the heart with such tenderness. I really love reading your poetry, Mark~ Thanks for this~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The eye of touch goes numb to call of wind Between endeavors of true passions blend Broken in spirit to the chains of yesterday On bended knee ... to promise of that day Mark, you have the ability to take the reader by the hand teaching many lessons, and pointing out views on life...you can paint emotions of sky, the desire of earth, and powerfully execute the eyes of your mind...sincere and most humble. Thank you for the voyage. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Broken in spirit to the chains of yesterday On bended knee ... to promise of that day Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem Rise of stem to toast in celebrations dance Behind screens of wonder locked in chance I'm not sure why this reminds me of an old saying heard "destiny is not a matter of chance, it is a matter of choice..." sometimes we make good choices...sometimes not so good, but we learn as we go. I have libraried this one Mark Christoper, it is truly a wonderful write. The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
TD - Thank you for the double back and the song of Cherokee winds is always a good choice for the ear. JM - Feels good to NOT be so much a moth doesn't it girlie. You shine in metallic and float in whisper. Thank you. BluesSerenade - And I love it when you stop by. You always give a smile in your reply and let me know what you liked about the write. That means much. Thank you dearly. LeeJ - The words you gift me with are words that could be and should be gifted to you on any one of your works. You have a vision of heart and soul mixed with understanding and compassion. Thank you very much. Gentle Spirit - Exactly it and well stated. We all hopefully learn and move on but the crime is the punishment dished out to those that find themselves subject to judgement from past mistakes without chance of reconcile. Thank you for the double look. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Mark...I enjoyed this very very much. Forbidden......If only??? Thanks for the lesson...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark Excellent work. This part really struck me... "The eye of touch goes numb to call of wind Between endeavors of true passions blend Broken in spirit to the chains of yesterday On bended knee ... to promise of that day" You've come a long long way in your endeavors of expression. Have a great day Eric |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem Rise of stem to toast in celebrations dance Behind screens of wonder locked in chance" always, your poetry is stunning... so great to see you in here so often |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Never forbidden... perhaps hidden from seeking eyes... but that's when the heart has to see... and believe. Beautiful work! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Sincere was the quest, the hope, the dream Triangled in powers to what others deem Rise of stem to toast in celebrations dance Behind screens of wonder locked in chance" A perfect penning of the reasons I gave up on love and have pursued instead...big game hunting. Specifically tigers, dancing tigers.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
that tiger dont look so scared... me thinks hes heard about your aim... lmao  |
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