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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-11-12 09:43 AM

Droplets of Feel

I've tried, the commitment
always in default
as I push back the past,
preventing its reoccurring
but knowing it keeps shadowing me
even in the pouring rain.

I second guess the timing,
notice more than I wish and wonder
why it is I always come in second,
even to words and maybe
even to truth.

Victory is always beyond me.
Loving, an unnamed flower,
dying in a hand held out
lost to touch.
Its aching noticeable
from the beating of wear.

A hardship week, when gentleness
escaped in the silence
of candles lit, accenting the desire,
wishing for the words, but knowing
the lack of is the norm.

I seem to live in "Neverland"
addicted though to my Alice
who cannot see herself for who she is anymore.
Inching closer but never reaching,
sometimes drowning
in the beat of my own heart.

And when this day is over
I shall drift further into the oblivion
that seeks my dreams and tosses them
into a meaningless poem...
thinking of
you.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (11-12-2004 10:14 AM).]

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2004-11-12 09:47 AM

huggin you

myheart
Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 160
lost in your eyes

2 posted 2004-11-12 09:49 AM

At one time or another, I believe we all tend to feel lost and alone. We aren't really. We just have to follow the bread crumbs carefully, slowly back to our stronger selves left sleeping. Great write.

~myheart~

Love is the poetry of the senses. ~Honoré de Balzac

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-11-12 09:51 AM

I do know "the lack of"

one day, maybe we'll write of being full

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2005-01-25 01:45 AM

"Loving, an unnamed flower,
dying in a hand held out
lost to touch."

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2005-01-25 11:13 AM

a sense of wounded gentleness in this..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2005-01-25 11:15 AM

wow...this was simply awesome!

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2005-01-25 02:34 PM

"And when this day is over
I shall drift further into the oblivion
that seeks my dreams and tosses them
into a meaningless poem...
thinking of
you."

I know, I know, I know...
I love that last verse to death!
Beautiful emotion.

JL

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-01-25 03:11 PM

Awesome indeed!

M

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

9 posted 2005-01-25 07:01 PM

Amazing...

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

10 posted 2005-01-25 07:12 PM

Feels like I could have wrote it myself. how can it be true though? Do you think the poem and poetry itself is like a disease that gets inside you eats and kills a period of time and leaving you feeling like once again you've been "robbed" of what could have been?

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

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