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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2004-11-10 08:55 AM


The day woke up slowly
bringing a blend of something
somewhere in between
disbelief and wondering
        {or is that wandering..}
but still, I shook my head
and sipped my coffee
feeling it land in my gut
leaving me with the ache
of bitterness.

The already stained
and empty
coffee cup
you left in the sink
served only as reminder
that I never really have liked
the taste of discontentment......


I'm not afraid to speak my heart
and bare my soul, I'd rather know
the truth.  What say you?
{tritt/mellencamp}


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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-11-10 08:59 AM


I'm right there with ya....it stinks!

You have a marvelous and creative image going on here, a pleasure to read...evoked some memories as well.  

hugs
Me

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2004-11-10 09:01 AM


Gentle,
Well done, a delight to read.

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Louisiana
3 posted 2004-11-10 10:33 AM


It does leave such a bitter aftertaste. *S*

Great write! *S*

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-11-10 11:02 AM


Ouch!
Excellent write Donna!
Hugs~

Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
5 posted 2004-11-10 01:04 PM


Bravo Donna!!

That gut feeling is always right..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2004-11-10 07:00 PM


we are mirrors of each other
inkedgoddess
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Ohio
7 posted 2004-11-10 07:59 PM


maybe a change in brand is in order
tho are any really good to the last drop?

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
8 posted 2004-11-10 08:34 PM


Donna, you know how to draw the reader into your world...


Linda

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2004-11-11 09:14 AM


Here's to hoping the coffee tastes better today...   Thanks all for your support.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

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