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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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so this is it, she began, the sum total of roughly 30 revolutions i knew better than to interrupt sitting by windows you learn to envy leaves.. she paused, catching herself all ends should be so beautiful i poured us another drink a final.brilliant.outburst colourful. she sipped, i sighed she'd been reading ahkmatova again but we....too many better than bukowski i argued after him she's inconsolable or horny wither and grey.. and i was too drunk to put in the effort tonight our last breath..drags i made the sign of the cross and baptized my tongue in old no. 7 amen she whispered amen. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lmao jammed huh???? Raph... you now have no excuses..and you have no place to hide... Damn... this..I truly like... truly |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh now Raph....this just rocks, and it made me smile...very well done sir.. yep, I like very much... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wOw Aenimal!!!! this urges...into prayer...love it! **babygirL* |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
sitting by windows you learn to envy leaves.. she paused, catching herself all ends should be so beautiful Your writing is just awesome! ~myheart~ Love is the poetry of the senses. ~Honoré de Balzac |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A prayer of a different order ~ but it sure makes one helluvva an intriguing poem! ~ and I thought a baptism had to be performed with holy water! Sheeesh! Thanks for letting me know otherwise! Better late that never!   EA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raph...I see so much in this...honesty..heart...So good, you! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"our last breath..drags" indeed. Raph, your depths run far deeper than even you understand.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
amen...  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Amen indeed, wow..Marvelous writing Bello. it's a  Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
sitting by windows you learn to envy leaves.. she paused, catching herself And reading some lines, you learn to envy poets. *S* Excellent work! *S* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow... a simple, silent, heartfelt, wow... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I ditto Sunshine... WOW!! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
and here he is . . . I wanted to keep reading. I have truly missed this, Raph. It is beyond perfect. It is beauty. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Wow! This is incredible. What can say that hasn't already been said. A moment, captured. Wonderfully written. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, you are good, yanno? ...a sip in time? |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Honestly...I admire your talent. I know everyone says it, but wow. Great job. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I suspect she has a way with holy water too.  An awesome write, that leaves me smiling, and alternately frowning at my own empty glass. tsk...good medicine.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thank you all for reading and for the words of support. i really appreciate it and Ron, you just reminded me of a Spaceballs scene: Radartech: Sir. The radar, sir. It appears to be . . . jammed Dark Helmet: Jammed? ...Raspberry. There is only one man who would DARE to give me the raspberry. Lone Star! Damn that Mel Brooks. Cheesy but oh so fun. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Geez Raph, what are you smoking and why aren't you sharing? You're awesome, I adore you. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
inconsolable or horny...? Not that I'm not already both those things way too often, but that sounds good to me. I've really got to check out these people you always talk about. Um, anyway. Back to the subject. You're amazing. You have so much talent or ability or maybe just a well tuned mix of both. Loved this write... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wonderful voice in this, Aenimal. Especially loved the ending. Corinne |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thank you muchly ladies, and Megs you know i'd share, honest! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
brilliant as always, tho i'm a bit stumped again....but to answer you: yes raffi, it IS life, not me or in cobain's words...... We can have some more, Nature is a whore Bruises on the fruit Tender age in bloom |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome you |
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