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Victorian Thin
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Victorian Thin |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Victorian Thin Were I to build an arbor in Victorian thin Would it grant ivy vines in paths to touch Were I to place mums in portrait of begin Would you see this fire smoldering in Autumn clutch Were I to catch three rays of golden glow Would you braid them in morning delight Were I to wrap the night in a starry bow Would you find a dream horizontal in constellation sight Were I to lace a path in magnolia hall Would it find carpets of petal perfume Were I to plants seeds on whispers call Would you feel the winds beckoning our history to resume Were I to drink rain in diamond dance Would it quench a thirst in visions eye Were I to take miles in country glance Would you find travel in my yearnings ... knowing why Mark Christopher |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
we can travel without moving, with our feet planted firmly on the ground.... incredible write...enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Were I to drink rain in diamond dance Would it quench a thirst in visions eye Were I to take miles in country glance Would you find travel in my yearnings ... knowing why" Oh yes!! And this is absolutely beautiful sir. Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MagaFriend~ 'Would you find travel in my yearnings ... knowing why' Yes ...~ I believe you have walked the meadow of thought once more~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
this was really good  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sunshine - My mother always told me to take at least 2 minutes to think before saying "yes". Thank you. LeeJ - You are so very right and thank you much. Enchantress - Thank you much for the beautiful and the visit. Much appreciated. Marge - It is my desire to be in the middle of the meadow as often as possible. Thank you my friend of spirit walks. MGROVES - Thank you much. Glad you liked. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
some very cool lines in this one Mark, as always enjoyed the opportunity to read you again. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark "Were I to take miles in country glance Would you find travel in my yearnings ... knowing why" Yes! No thought necessary to answer yes. Could you write a poem anymore gorgeous? NO! (well maybe you could, but I couldn't) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mark, I enjoy reading all of your life's travels. They are journeys of the heart, the mind and of the soul. The world through your poetic eyes is a wondrous thing to behold. Love & Light, Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I fall captive into the beauty of your words, most lovely and sigh worthy - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know Mark I can always tell if someone has been on a "discovery" for words begin to take on new meanings and a life of their own when expelled from the heart. Absolutely breathtaking. The answer to your question without hesitation would of course be yes, from any one in their right mind I believe.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The arbor path is lined with the lusty blooms of fall. Each their own of scent, and each to heart does call. A keepsake. Love in starlight is blessed. TD |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Victorian thin the very first line and already you lay down the perfect personifi. Would you see this fire smoldering in Autumn clutch and that line is pure poetry in motion!! Were I to catch three rays of golden glow Would you braid them in morning delight how lovely is that... Were I to lace a path in magnolia hall Would it find carpets of petal perfume Were I to plants seeds on whispers call Would you feel the winds beckoning our history to resume that verse is picture perfect...such wonderful poetic employ of imagery..something there to tease all of the senses and paint such a lovely portrait in the reader's minds eye.(the first verse as well) Were I to drink rain in diamond dance Would it quench a thirst in visions eye Were I to take miles in country glance Would you find travel in my yearnings ... knowing why each of those couplets should be held up to the light to see the true colors of your vision.... I love the way you presented this...both in writing with the theme of questions and in the lines staggered to add to its beauty. You painted a landscape panaramic with your words and a still life garden scene became a walk in Eden. Another gem of verse MC. Poetry is emotion put into measure. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Gentle Spirit - And as always I enjoy the oppurtunity to read your comments and read you as well. Thank you much. Martie - I truely thank you for that but never doubt ( cause I don't ) that you could and DO write them more gorgeous than I ever could. Earth Angel - I am humbled by your words and I thank you dearly for always being so kind. Susan - Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed. Mysteria - I always try to write from the heart so as to not confuse myself as to where I am at. Thank you much. ThisDiamond - Yes, a call to a heart from another heart does find it's own path. Thank you dearly and if you find it a keepsake then I am honored. JM - Well there ya go again trying to make me sound like a real poet LOL. You know I thank you for always giving me more in your reply than I feel I earned but then again, that is one reason why so many ( including myself ) treasure you so much. Thank you and you know how much your appreciated. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Me thinks the Master has returned! You convey very well. "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Always a splendid write from you Mark Christopher. Greatly enjoyed. Another for my library Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
EagleOne - Well nice to see you. Thank you kind sir. Dark Angel - You honor me with each visit and I thank you much. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Were I to catch three rays of golden glow Would you braid them in morning delight Were I to wrap the night in a starry bow Would you find a dream This is so lovely... how could anyone answer anything but yes? *S* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
suthern - That in time will hopefully be the answer found, but the time pattern does have to respect the reassurance. Thank you for stopping by and gracing me with your "suthern" charm. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Immersed in the mysterious beauty of your words leaves the reader wanting more. Encore my friend! Deb |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
BloomingRose - Thank you. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Mark Your words are always an absolute delight to read. "A poet weaves his words through each verse to create a most beautiful tapestry for us all to admire" -Sue Tancheff- Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sue - Thank you and your visits are also an absolute delight as well. |
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