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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-11-08 08:33 AM


gravel haired road
with dirty shoes
I remember the curves

from kid man and his posse
some saturday ago
when morning had one eye

and cornflakes
I shot the rooster
with my bow and arrow

and cut out the feathers
for my war bonnet
but susie laughed

and pulled the duct tape
and my hair
and pushed me down

and kissed me
I remember her smell
like pretty soap

and pancake syrup


_______
Dark  (satin & glass)


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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-11-08 08:35 AM


AHA!  So it was you who
was hogging the floor
for the B&W toons
of Saturday...

move over, will ya?

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-11-08 08:41 AM


LOL, a nice picture you've painted for Monday morning read....clever as usual with a hint of humor....enjoyed!

Especially enjoyed the ending

Cpat Hair
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

3 posted 2004-11-08 10:11 AM


yeah.... that smell of soap..and pancake syrup, gets me every time..


Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-11-08 10:16 AM


Ya made me smile with this one Dark.
Much enjoyed.
Hugs~E


Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
5 posted 2004-11-08 10:19 AM


Mmmm - pancakes and Saturday mornings - could life get any better?  Loved this view D-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
6 posted 2004-11-08 10:37 AM


giggle, delightful, love the images, one eye open, cornflakes, syrup smell the only thing missing, but I can hear it now...the blades of the push mower whirring from the neighbor's yard  

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
7 posted 2004-11-08 04:31 PM


only a special gal could get under that tough skin i am sure...
may you be blessed as you still inhale her
in your afterthoughts

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
8 posted 2004-11-08 06:23 PM


DS

"and kissed me
I remember her smell
like pretty soap

and pancake syrup"

Sweet!  Really enjoyed this as it brought a few memories back of my own.  Thanks!  

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
9 posted 2004-11-08 06:29 PM


Our sense of smell is the last to go! May yours be always keen ~ literally and figuratively!


EA

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