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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2004-11-07 11:25 PM



Sunset
Hill
wooded with maple

Snow on branches
old village roofs

Blue water

The river
meanders
through withered grasses

In a brown kimono
with a white umbrella—

the slender woman
on stone Drum Bridge


http://www.californianevada.com/gallery/japane     se-art-kuniyoshi-hiroshge-hosukai/hiroshige-drum-bridge-and-sunset-hill-meguro.jpg


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2004-11-07 11:33 PM


Enjoyed the mood...James
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2 posted 2004-11-07 11:34 PM


now this is a beautiful write, John, and the picture link is fabulous
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3 posted 2004-11-08 05:07 AM


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4 posted 2004-11-08 06:40 AM


In a brown kimono
with a white umbrella—

the slender woman
on stone Drum Bridge

now this feels haikuish

LeeJ
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5 posted 2004-11-08 06:47 AM


feels brisk and cold to me...like walking in a first snow of the year...wonderfully serene, snow falling and collecting fast...light and wet...as I was reading this, it took me to that place, before clicking on the link for the picture you so kindly worded for us.  Beautifully done!
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6 posted 2004-11-08 08:42 AM


Lovely eye-lines here, John.
Thank you!

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