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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-11-07 08:30 AM

I heard the clouds
dragging their hems
on the pale blue sky

long dresses on ladies
with stormy intentions
and nothing under

but future rivers
if the mountains they loved
were willing to hold them

for just a few hours

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Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2004-11-07 08:49 AM

Dark~
This is soooooooooooooo rich~

'I heard the clouds
dragging their hems
on the pale blue sky'

Oh ... oh ... I just LOVE that !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-11-07 08:52 AM

Short on words but
long on metaphor...

you've got to love a poet
like that!

Excellent imagery, DS

myheart
Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 160
lost in your eyes

3 posted 2004-11-07 10:51 AM

dragging their hems
on the pale blue sky

This is one heck of a write !!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-11-07 11:38 AM

DS

I heard them too, but never could have written it like you do.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-11-07 11:40 AM

D-

You are truly gifted -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

6 posted 2004-11-07 11:54 AM

niiice, dark....nice...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2004-11-07 12:26 PM

good stuff! I especially like:

if the mountains were willing to hold them...

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2004-11-07 12:53 PM

"I heard the clouds
dragging their hems
on the pale blue sky"

Loved that stanza!
Dark...I loved this poem!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2004-11-07 01:00 PM

excellent

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

10 posted 2004-11-07 01:13 PM

wave sailing on the bike again, eh?
where can I get magic vision goggles like yours?

K

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2004-11-07 01:27 PM

mountains peaking
rivers flowing
short skirts and the breeze blowing
me with my hands strapped across your engines

makes for my kind of ride

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2004-11-07 07:24 PM

very cool

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