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Finally Making Wings that Open
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Finally Making Wings that Open |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Finally Making Wings that Open Take the laces from my morning cloak time is open to all seasons for this grass yields to bare feet and the dew not yet frozen is a giver of this memory from ground and gone lit by time the tree has defended the sky beyond See the very hope of children in the den the ring of music hums within their bones the gallop moves me still and the climb of knowledge so many steps I’ve lost to the ill fit shoe and yet counting one and two I can’t erase the path nor find the gate Could there be a God within this place of sky the birds have come and gone and left me flight yet no where to go to find the invisible thread I yearn to sew but yes I tangle lines instead There is a pattern single and worthy feeling silken on the inside lining lost at thirty and the grace of giving stretch is comfort chosen as hand to hand together somehow love is spoken and the sound grinds this dirt and tears together finally making wings that open [This message has been edited by Martie (11-07-2004 12:24 AM).] |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Mmm! Love it Martie! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh Martie, you make me sway, with your striking images. love it! Mxx  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, Martie....no surprise to me here.... I've always told you that you could fly, if you wanted to.... See? Ole Ed knows a thing or two.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Each stanza stands alone as a single, short poem... but silk slip-tied together with a lover's knot, they make forever come real, and Daedalus no fool... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhDearSis~ 'Could there be a God within this place of sky' Yes ... and He gives you word-wings with which you fly ... beautifully~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Wings of the mind are always there, it's where you fly that counts. Excellent write  |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I find much pathos of life in here. I love your work and always learn from your writing. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Last stanza is my favorite and the "hand in hand" line my most favorite!!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Could there be a God within this place of sky the birds have come and gone and left me flight yet no where to go to find the invisible thread I yearn to sew but yes I tangle lines instead There is a pattern single and worthy feeling silken on the inside lining lost at thirty and the grace of giving stretch is comfort chosen as hand to hand together somehow love is spoken and the sound grinds this dirt and tears together finally making wings that open" Incredibly beautiful sweet Martie!! A keeper for my library....click. Hugs~Nancy Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
sighs..what you do with images Martie. hugs |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Could there be a God within this place of sky the birds have come and gone and left me flight yet no where to go to find the invisible thread I yearn to sew but yes I tangle lines instead ************** You DO soar and you do it with the grace of precision of a swallow at dusk in play. I am reading something in this that I am very proud of you for ( even if it isn't clear to you yet). Goes back to some discussions we have had in the past about that one thing you couldn't find belief in. *************** as hand to hand together somehow love is spoken and the sound grinds this dirt and tears together finally making wings that open *************** It does take time and now I am anxiously awaiting to see what flight path you end up on. Excellent as always and you know how much I enjoy your vision in color play. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have been trying to pinpoint the feeling I get when I read your work, and I think it's very close to what I feel when I say, "church." Your poetry is like having "church." Martie. Quietly powerful and awe-inspiring. You are simply the best.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How can I put into words how you touch me with your poetry Marti? The simple and striking way you present the wonders of the world through your eyes, is like the bow of a master violin. Beautiful. TD |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
You do write very touching poetry Martie - it touches so deeply and paints such powerful images on my mind and heart. You are the greatest - Paul |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
there is such simple grace and beauty to your words and soul Martie... indeed I do love reading you gal.. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I see red clay wings and a red clay halo I'm with Karen! There is "Spirit" in your words. |
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