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London Bridge
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London Bridge |
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baseballpoet Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 36 |
London Bridge is falling down, falling down my fair lady And noone can why with their naked eye But its all my fault you see I'm Supposed to be the beam, that supports everything But there's a crack at the center of me. So when you wonder why we're falling apart, All you have to do is look inside my heart There you will see deep inside of me That my spirit is broken and my faith is weak The titanic is sinking, that glorious vessel The ship that nobody though would sink...will And I am the captain that fell asleep at the wheel I didn't head the warnings, I ignored all the signs Now I know that its nobody's fault but mine So when you wonder why we're drowning at sea, All you have to do is take another peek There you will see deep inside of me That my spirit is broken and my faith is weak. I know that my foolishness may have well been the demise of our relationship and caused it to end I am so much better than the person I've been, I beg you please let me try again, let me try again |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
There's so much disaster that i find it hard to believe it's all your fault especially when you write about it so exceptionally. Good work. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this aches  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I could tell that you wrote this in a flow of emotion. Some parts of words fell off as you tried to keep up with what was writing itself from your heart. The content here is so beautifully crafted, so clear in its impact, that I hope you will go back and tidy the edges. This is as natural as a river flowing to the sea...and should be heard clearly in it's entirety. Great Write. TD |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Everyone is weak sometimes. I liked this - may you find strength soon. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"So when you wonder why we're falling apart, All you have to do is look inside my heart There you will see deep inside of me That my spirit is broken and my faith is weak" Hope this was somehow boost your spirit:  ~Alli~  *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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