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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279
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this is the story of morning. this is the mo(u)rning in my hands: i place an empty mug a top the old pine table, i hear it speak /the white whisper of dead trees/ i hear the sugar swarming my veins i hear you wrapped carefully in the cold november sun - cutting the window and my day with a pierce of, oh, how do i say, remember? no matter the morning, truly, you are: gathered in small pockets of my muscles aching, small zippered strands in my hair you are: tracing the small lines in my hands and mouth, all of the small slits breathing. still. -- and when it breaks this way, around six a m with the alarm singing, with the sun, with the short hush of the neighborhood rustling up for work or their days – when it opens this slowly, uncurling tenderly, opens like some big being with great doctor’s hands unstitching it himself, i know that you are here somehow with out understanding how you are here. -- and i sway carefully in to the shower, the clothing, the coffee. i sway still. i hear the knots forming. i hear the rounding and tying in my throat, i feel it swell. and if you ever wonder say, where ive gone or go or don’t care at all either way it is all right. one hand calms the other hand, and we see: where i continue to rest in the places where you’ve stepped - how i round the under side of my foot in to where your foot was or went - round it softly, press it full. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Alicia You inspire me....the way you bring feeling to life with just the pefect words. I am so very touched by this poem.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
damn... can I learn to write like you when I grow up..or at least before I die? ::shaking head::: I doubt it... but I sure can enjoy your words here... and try |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"where i continue to rest in the places where you’ve stepped - how i round the under side of my foot in to where your foot was or went - round it softly, press it full." My oh my Alicia....this is wonderful writing. The emotion pours like tears from your pen. I so very much enjoyed the read. Hugs~Nancy Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Martie and the Captain have it so right.... wow is this ever a beautiful and beautifully written poem....I'll join that line of folks who want to write like you. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there is a deep place where the mind goes and fills up with thoughts...asking questions, always pondering....yet somehow knowing...and you bring these thoughts alive to awaken the reader through your open windows of time...well done lady well done |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
rubbing the bottom of my foot, feeling how this write sinks in, molding my thoughts today |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i always find it difficult responding to your poetry. trying to find a balance between encouragement and gushing praise. um...so yeah,this poem is..uh..cool.shrugs. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::laughing at Raph::: Know exactly what you mean Raph... I never quite know what to say either...so usually babble... like now.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I too, try not to be too blatantly worshipful of you. You have a balance of intellect, imagery and emotion that would leave me envious, if you weren't such a lovely lady. So like everybody else, I aspire...  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Deep breath in.....Awesome! Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
really nice write... Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
this is fantastic. agh...so good. i'm your new biggest fan. in the end it's not just you with your memories and your scars, fall on me if you ever forget how beautiful you are. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
First I've read by you...loved it!!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Always enjoy your work, take care. "A spring shower was cause to run |
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