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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-11-05 07:44 AM


putting faces on surfers
when they stand at the railing
watching the waves

you say they are extreme
and that it makes you shake
when they move under you

you like my arms now
that you have lost the shell
and made it into as basket

for flowers and snapshots
of scary things from before
like stories from utah

and other people's shoes
that never were yours to wear
since you like bare foot love

and surfers watching you dance
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Dark (satin series)



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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2004-11-05 07:53 AM


nicely done sir... you capture with few words the elemental nature of people and of situations.. something I do admire...

always a pleasure to read.. and re-read..


LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-11-05 08:26 AM


and other people's shoes
that never were yours to wear
since you like bare foot love

and surfers watching you dance

I like her...a lot

wonderful write....sending you hugs and a bright Good good Morning...wishing you a happy Friday!



Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2004-11-05 08:56 AM


Your titles are always as compelling a note
as the poems that lie beneath them...

Never a disappointment...

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
4 posted 2004-11-05 10:19 AM


and other people's shoes
that never were yours to wear
since you like bare foot love

I like this passage especially - the whole poem speaks to me - I do enjoy submerging myself in a bit of Dark in the morning

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Martie
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5 posted 2004-11-05 10:46 AM


DS

"Barefoot love" ...yes!  You paint this scene so well!  Much enjoyed!

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2004-11-05 01:26 PM


very cool piece
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