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Small And Simple Sums
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Small And Simple Sums |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Just collections over time Simple basics on a dime Earthen textures sieve my hand Rambling footnotes contraband Not of gold or silver jewel Not a gemstone to be seen Just an iridescent castle In the fortress of a dream Nothing heavy or too much Simple keepsakes cherished such Just the basics said and sighed Mark the moments as applied Not of gold or silver jewel Not a gemstone to be seen Just an iridescent castle In the fortress of a dream As I look into your eyes Offered all the most I prize Might it be too small to see Just the sum of all of me Copyright Kkh 11/04/04 [This message has been edited by ThisDiamond (11-05-2004 12:58 AM).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Nothing heavy or too much Simple keepsakes cherished such Just the basics said and sighed Mark the moments as applied ********************* I really like that verse alot. Keeping it simple is often the best way to keep it. However ... *********** Just an iridescent castle In the fortress of a dream ******************** Dreams can become real life when you least expect it, it's just that darn key to unlocking the entrance. ************ As I look into your eyes Offered all the most I prize Might it be too small to see Just the sum of all of me ******************* That final verse is perfect and I have a feeling that the sum of you is not to small to see by any means even for a blind man. I really enjoyed the tone in this one and the repetitive verse is cool. Sort of brings some mood music into play when reading aloud. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Thank you Mark. I am truly touched by your reply. I have found your works a wonderful mentor, and your encouragement very warm. TD |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Beautiful poem, very lyrical... Played this on the guitar C/A-minor/F/G or transcribe to your own voice pitch...As a song, when the normal spoken word will not suffice... enjoyed ---------ice ><> Come read to me some poem, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Thank you Ice...that's the first time anyone ever suggested such a thing. What a wonderful compliment. I think this is one of my own personal favorites. That is rare indeed. I humbly thank you. TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Not of gold or silver jewel Not a gemstone to be seen Just an iridescent castle In the fortress of a dream Dreams are indeed our fortress inspiring and happy read...thank you |
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