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Susan
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2004-11-04 08:27 PM



a chill kiss profferred
with blush of rush of-

     cold air

words written
in condensation-

      read . . .

   winter is near

s.a.t.

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

© Copyright 2004 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2004-11-04 10:13 PM


Like writing your name on a breath-frosted pane....Nice!
ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2004-11-05 01:02 AM


Liked Wranx reply...just like a frosted pane...
Excellent imagery Susan.
TD

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2004-11-05 01:24 AM


Being there is condensation, I would have to say there is a warmth just on the other side.  Very nice write and I hope you find a title for this one.
Huan Yi
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4 posted 2004-11-05 01:35 AM


http://www.ibiblio.org/wm/paint/auth/vinci/joconde/joconde.jpg
ice
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since 2003-05-17
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5 posted 2004-11-05 06:28 AM


Excellent----enjoyed

The signs are everywhere....

----------ice/ford
   ><>


Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2004-11-05 07:06 AM


nice... this just feels organic to read... and since the subject here seems to blend a bit of sensual and a bit of nature, appeals to me. One can also read the layers if they choose, and let it take them to other conclusions...

yes.... truly a treat this morning..

Kethry
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7 posted 2004-11-05 07:16 AM


Very graphic and alive. But what does s.a.t. stand for? Or is that your signature?

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
8 posted 2004-11-05 07:46 AM


I breathed on the glass
and watched the reflection
in vapor
as the word appeared

C E R T S
musta been the garlicburger

enjoyed this ms

Susan
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walking the surreal
9 posted 2004-11-05 10:57 AM


Thank you friends - and I am tickled at the mona lisa - i've seen her, you know - in person - well at least the painting  

Kethry - s.a.t. is my signature - my initials- i include the "." so that people don't think all my poems end with sat -hehe

D-

Have a good day all - 'tis friday -yeah!

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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10 posted 2004-11-05 06:20 PM


beautiful write!

~Alli~

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