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babygirlwlove
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0 posted 2004-11-04 02:52 PM



Electric words
suck prayers each night
from frayed darkness.
our needs on calloused knees
forgiven by those frostbitten appeals
left alone too long, the wrong
word is spoken, faith
taken as a token of this waifen
survival, in chrome messages,
mirrors broken by the threadbare
dreams of pebbles piled
on the tongue, pumice seams
of cracked syntax,
he loves me at a distance,
instant words become papery,
electric fuzz, way back
in the mind to showboat, to gloat
as muzzled tigers leap
into sunflowers and dissipate
in a hiss of frayed wires,
only to be remade
by the fires that wake
oblivion.

2004 copyright babygirLPress

::a bit of petulance, I will ask your forbearance, as this afternoon finds me pacing my cage::

P E A C E and O N E

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

© Copyright 2004 babygirLPress - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2004-11-04 02:58 PM


our needs on calloused knees
forgiven by those frostbitten appeals
left alone too long, the wrong
word is spoken, faith
taken as a token of this waifen
survival, in chrome messages,
mirrors broken by the threadbare
dreams of pebbles piled
on the tongue

your writing amazes me and leaves me waiting for the next peice.  well done.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Cpat Hair
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Posts 11793

2 posted 2004-11-04 02:58 PM


(chuckling)

petulance.... and pacing cages produces this?

some cages can be opened...

tried calling a locksmith?

nicely done ma'am.. nicely done


Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-11-04 03:00 PM


Ah, cage pacing - yes - understand.  These words, incredible - I am fascinated by minds that work in such words - enjoyed -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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4 posted 2004-11-04 05:53 PM


So pace...James
Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
5 posted 2004-11-04 09:54 PM




personally, i got tired of pacing

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
6 posted 2004-11-04 10:24 PM


Pacing....yep, then slipping under the bars.
babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
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New York City
7 posted 2004-11-05 01:43 PM


thank you all for putting up with my nonsense..LOL

Raph~**lmao**...only you...**lol**

thanks guys,
**BabaygirL**

Cpat Hair
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8 posted 2004-11-05 04:57 PM


Electric words
suck prayers each night
from frayed darkness.
our needs on calloused knees
forgiven by those frostbitten appeals
left alone too long, the wrong
word is spoken, faith
taken as a token of this waifen
survival, in chrome messages,
mirrors broken by the threadbare
dreams of pebbles piled
on the tongue, pumice seams
of cracked syntax,
he loves me at a distance,


petulance inspires ....



eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
9 posted 2004-11-05 07:15 PM


um...really...wow, this is like all my thoughts of the [ast week that wont get out of my head ans on to the page...thanks for inspiring me...

Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move
Over arms length they'll break protocol
Jealous envy for the youngest one

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
10 posted 2004-11-05 07:53 PM


loving at a distance

I have one of those too

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
11 posted 2004-11-05 08:18 PM


chief...

"petulance inspires "

lol...thank goodness...

**babyblu**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
12 posted 2004-11-05 08:19 PM


eor & passing shadows...

thanks for checking this out...

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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