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Open Poetry #34
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Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881


0 posted 2004-11-04 08:17 AM


I was standing in dark shadows
looking into the basement,
the bright-light subconscious...
a pool table in a dank room
with bets wagered...
they were disappointed

the split had turned the tides
away from liquid
and they knew me
with their frowns...
with the corners of their mouths
turned down

I placed the warm red glass
on the old black fender
so familiar
and said words I couldn’t comprehend
but they knew them
and they left me

without saying goodbye


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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-11-04 08:21 AM


what a great way to express it...terrific visuals...

impressive and most poetic....
Morning!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2004-11-04 08:24 AM


Kahlil
A trick of the mind, good write.

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