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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-11-04 08:02 AM



where will I spend
my penny head jesus
will it buy the bread
and fish full of miracles

I have thrown my nets
on the other side of the sky
and seen the water walking
on the bare foot man

the sayer says it is I
that is under sighted
when my drown of day
is really just a dawning

my nails have scars
of hand prints on them
they were not wet
but the polish was to thick

for the pressure
of the crucifix I wore
before the peace sign
with full metal jacket

and a three second pin


______________

Dark


scribble note: view of dad from an over analytical democratic daughter..raspberry was the reply

© Copyright 2004 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
babygirlwlove
Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
1 posted 2004-11-04 08:12 AM


oh my...this is something of you I haven't ever seen...

wow
damn...wow
what a poem...
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-11-04 08:14 AM


hehehehhee, Oh boy I loved this, cannot tell you the headspin of understanding this provoked, you say it so softly and so sublimital, but my dear man, you do get your point across.  Wish so, I could be more like you...in that respect...smiles and hugs...good morning and thank you for a wonderful read

On of My favorites of yours

Hugs


Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2004-11-04 08:15 AM



I would have had a very serious reply
until I saw the scribble note...

  Parents, unite!  LOL...good morning, DS...

Kahlil
Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

4 posted 2004-11-04 08:22 AM


ow, my head....
(wink)

K

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2004-11-04 08:30 AM


Dark,
You rattled the bones now you must read them. Good write

Cpat Hair
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

6 posted 2004-11-04 09:35 AM


the sayer says it is I
that is under sighted
when my drown of day
is really just a dawning

my nails have scars
of hand prints on them
they were not wet
but the polish was to thick

for the pressure
of the crucifix I wore
before the peace sign
with full metal jacket

and a three second pin
yes.. while I always enjoy reading your offering sir.. this and these lines strike me....

well done... well done indeed

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
7 posted 2004-11-04 10:06 AM


This says many things to me, invokes many images of ages past and considerations then that repeat themselves now - more perhaps than intended - but I enjoy the thinking -

Hugs this morning - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
8 posted 2004-11-04 10:24 AM


DS

This is deep...just where I like you.  Wonderfully done!  

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
9 posted 2004-11-04 10:29 AM


This was most outstanding!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
10 posted 2004-11-04 04:03 PM


no easy solutions
and the truths lay somewhere in the greys
only 2 things ring clear to me these days:
love and fear

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