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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2004-11-03 12:29 PM


It's always been
the other side of me
that is often the most
difficult    to see
I'm not an illusion
    I am real,
I have hopes
I continue to feel.
I don't wear masks
    I won't play games
You can't   know me
if you only know me
         by name.
I've shown you my trust
but still, your heart fears
   it hurts me  inside

       I still feel your tears....


I don't like lies, I'd rather know the truth...
what say you?  {Tritt/Mellencamp}


[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-04-2004 02:20 PM).]

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1 posted 2004-11-03 12:35 PM


"I've shown you my trust
but still, your heart fears
   it hurts me  inside

       I still feel your tears...."


Beautiful...bittersweet write Donna.
Hugs~

Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

LeeJ
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2 posted 2004-11-03 01:12 PM


I'm not an illusion
    I am real,
I have hopes
I continue to feel.
I don't wear masks
    I won't play games


and the best way to be...I'd pick you to play on my team any day...

Sad write, but one thing for certain...you don't and won't ever leave any stone unturned...

I hope this person learns to trust you
hugs

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3 posted 2004-11-03 01:23 PM


just keep shining....
and one day that person will see the light

Soleil Noir
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4 posted 2004-11-03 01:30 PM



Sensitive people are just so,
just like this.

Well done, Donna.

Congratulations on your 8,000th Post!

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2004-11-03 08:05 PM


love this
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2004-11-03 09:48 PM


I've shown you my trust
but still, your heart fears
   it hurts me  inside

       I still feel your tears....


==================================

yessss....exactly.....
lovely lovely poetess Donna

Poetry is emotion put into measure.
The emotion comes by nature ...
but the measure is acquired by art.

Thomas Hardy


Martie
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7 posted 2004-11-03 11:04 PM


Donna...You always write with such honesty of feeling.  Congratulations on 8000...for all the poetry and replies...you are appreciated!  
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2004-11-04 02:02 AM


Let's hope this person is listening and learns what is really there.  Nice honest write and done so in a wonderful flow of words and heart.
bslicker
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state of mind
9 posted 2004-11-04 11:09 AM


Congratulations!!!
.
.
.
.
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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10 posted 2004-11-04 11:11 AM


This is absolutely beautiful... and goes right to the heart. *S*
Sunshine
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11 posted 2004-11-04 11:12 AM



You know Mom loves this...

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2004-11-04 12:25 PM


~ and you are beautiful on the inside and on the out!

You have the gift of being able to relate what you are feeling to others.

Donna, I believe you to be the sort of person whom everyone would trust ~ and love.

Linda

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2004-11-04 12:26 PM


Your all so great!  

and, these have been a wonderful 8000 and I am looking forward to more.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

miscellanea
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14 posted 2004-11-04 01:06 PM


Enjoyed this INside and OUt!  Congratulations on passing 8,000, Donna.  I can't imagine ever doing that!  Great job.
             miscellanea

babygirlwlove
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15 posted 2004-11-04 01:07 PM


I still feel your tears....


**beautifully expressed**
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Susan
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16 posted 2004-11-04 03:05 PM


This is so good - so well expressed - so much said -

Hugs - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2004-11-05 08:51 AM


Hey M, BBGL and Susan, thanks so much for stopping in and leaving your thoughts.  Peace to all.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Marge Tindal
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18 posted 2004-11-06 09:00 AM


AhGentleLadyOfGreatSpirit~
How much I enjoy reading you 'inside out'~
I know that there is great beauty within you that you share and share through your poetic pennings~
I thank you for that~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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myheart
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lost in your eyes
19 posted 2004-11-06 09:08 AM


there is such deep feeling behind your words. enjoyed this.
mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox
20 posted 2004-11-06 01:16 PM


deep and meaningful...i like the minimalist style. it works for you.

in the end it's not just you with your memories and your scars, fall on me if you ever forget how beautiful you are.

*Alli4000*
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21 posted 2004-11-06 11:38 PM


"I'm not an illusion
    I am real,
I have hopes"


I know how this feels...
powerful write...

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

Gentle Spirit
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22 posted 2004-11-08 10:38 AM


I am lucky to be among you all. Thanks!

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

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