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Dick and Jane
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Dick and Jane |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I met them when we were all very young And dressed in primary colors It was a simple time with monosyllabic needs I learned how to read with them, and to spell Together, we would thread letters onto short strings Knotting them into ordered thoughts But, times and needs change And Jane, ever observant, was content for a time With her view from over a white picket fence Though seeing, was not the same as feeling She set out for a more sophisticated lifestyle To see for herself what the rest of the world, felt While Dick, the boy who loved verbs Who would run and run, jump and jump The boy who spent page after page coming and going Would, at last, exhaust himself, coming to rest Sleeping in doorways I knew nothing of their lives until much later Busy, as I was, with much the same things Yet, do miss the “Janes” and their hot eager clinging But, never regret barely missing the chances To keep the nights warm by pissing myself Still, I thread into words, the letters they taught me Knotting them into thoughts of the past Stringing them around what “might have been” Tying the ends tight to the ends of what “is” And make for myself these Mobius Strips [This message has been edited by wranx (11-02-2004 11:24 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are amazing... and my appetite for your work continues to grow. I'm getting SO fat! LOL... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
::standing ovation::: whatever happened to spot, anyway...lol this is OUTSTANDING, Wranx!!!! **babygirL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
now.. aren't YOU glad this didn't have to sewn into some patchwork? (chuckling) you always amaze me sir... and this is no exception.. you go places I only drea of going in my own efforts.. and you add layers of depth that do so appeal to the senses as well as the voice I hear when I read your offerings... bravo... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Man, do I ever love this one! LOL, makin my mind recall those mobius strips...you do know how to delve, m'dear. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Wry humour Wranx Reminds of me of a King who said "but what happens when my daughter gets a little prick". "Well we can't handle everything", said the Prime Minister. She'll just have to sleep with it until the right Prince arrives. Great words. Dave |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'd love to be perched on the bank beside you Bro, and talk life...yanno? WOW! you're amazing.  Mxx Oh, you speak to me in riddles |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent excellent write Ed...so much enjoyed. I always wondered what happened to Dick and Jane. ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
raises his glass in salute |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
I really wish you had written this as an apostrophe to them rather than about them to us. John Read: “For Her” by Mark Strand |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fantastic...James |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... John... as the old saying goes... if wishes were horses beggars would ride... what ever the voice chosen... I personally think no matter how we..you or I might want the author of a piece to write it...or how we might see that the subject lends itself to some other approach... to say we wish they had written like we wanted instead of the way they did is bit..well.. pretentious isn't it? I mean..really... poets write poetry as they hear it..and us imposing the idea we wish they had done it differently is like saying we know better than them how they should write... personally... I don't think any of us here know enough about the way words are presented or what they mean to the people who do present them to say we know better than them how to approach a subject or write a verse... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And I am wondering, John, why you would assume this isn't that apostrephe that you have a yen for... but I have the pleasure of knowing this poet, and trust me, he always has more to say than most expect. I also trust you will find out.  Mobius Strips...shaking my head here. you are a gentle funny yeti-man.  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
smiling..... I knew before I read it where it would go but you surprised me anyway bro... DAMN goodgood you HAVE certainly moved to the next level and right after that little sabbatical hmmmmm told YA!....grin and thanks for the Howard Order sir I appreciate B |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
just had to come back to this Wranx.... this is just a super, super write! **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wranx, I can't think of much to write that others haven't! To end it with a Mobius Strip was great, but the observations within were incredibly written. You have such a soft pen that produces such a poignant write. It writes depth as gently as can be written. miscellanea |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ya know, I have always enjoyed your words sir and am a self confessed fan but I have to tell you... this is damn impressive Ed...  yep, and as said before, am darn glad this wasn't just a passing phase for you... The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
There is only one man who could take the simplest of language and meld it into a masterpiece. and I am better for having the honor of knowing him *smile* John, read and learn, m'friend . . . |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
yep amigo you just ripped the covers off it primo salsa in this bottle of scribble enjoyed it |
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