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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2004-10-31 02:09 PM



I visited heaven one silent cool winter day
I saw you there awaiting my arrival,
such a soft vision of tenderness.
You were wrapped in satin sheets
I could hear your heartbeat talk
I reached for you and you smiled.
felt like I was in a timeless stream
I was a king and you were my enamored queen
this filled the image with spirit
But, beyond looking superior and noble you looked afraid.
Suddenly! I was struck with shock as
the best of our best friends, became an evil bard,
and was quoting the first bard's black MacBeth
while holding a sword over your neck.....
demanding I give up your sacred beauty to him
I reached for you across a canyon of expanse
I screamed to the top of the world....!
as streams of blood splashed up into my face
I woke up!
beside my favourite girl.
You gave me smiling looks and reached to stroke my face,
long strokes, long and smooth, full of lazy love.
All our years you'd proved yourself a lady loyal.
You whispered in my ear, familiar words,
you said, "come to me, I'm going crazy!"

I pulled you to my chest and kissed your words into silence
I was going crazy!
or was this still a dream?
at this point I manage to know I'm raising up to roam your meadow,
so this can't be a dream,
as I pressed hard against you, again I heard you say,
"come to me, let's go crazy."

I could feel the flames of passion devouring my thighs
as your velvet skin lay exposed before me
your fire within blazing hot!
A droopy eyed smile filled your face.
Then you cascaded into my arms,
your sweet flavoured tongue probing mine....
suddenly I hear you loud and clear,
"The kids are late for school!"
and I wake up to see my favourite girl...shyly smiling
"The kids are late for school!" she repeats
smiling as if she knew where we'd just been.


© Eric True

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

© Copyright 2004 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2004-10-31 03:04 PM


Wow, Eric, this is quite a dream vision!

The better part of it may have a follow-up the next night!

Passionate write, I especially love the first lines though:

quote:
I visited heaven one silent cool winter day
I saw you there awaiting my arrival,
such a soft vision of tenderness.
You were wrapped in satin sheets
I could hear your heartbeat talk
I reached for you and you smiled.
felt like I was in a timeless stream



Love, Margherita

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2004-10-31 08:23 PM


Thank you Margherita I appreciate the read and the kind words.

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
3 posted 2004-11-01 01:31 PM


Sweet dreams from you Eric...lovely
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2004-11-01 03:11 PM


I loved it!!!

~ May your reverie become your reality! ~ yet somehow, I think it already has, romantic poet man!  


EA


Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

5 posted 2004-11-01 04:35 PM


Wonderful write!

Eric

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2004-11-02 07:16 PM


Sensual and more...James
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2004-11-03 03:54 AM


Thank you Paula always good to hear from you glad you could find the time to drop in.

Angel thanks for the kind words and taking the time to read this I do appreciate it very much.

Eric what a wonderful name you have...LOL! Thanks for dropping in and taking the time to read this. I appreciate the positive comments..

James. Good to hear from you and I know you know the sensual application because you write some of the best sensual poems I've read. I appreciate the read and the response.

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

Suetang
Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
8 posted 2004-11-03 10:44 PM


Wow, Eric!

To quote one of my favourite songs.....
"Sweet dreams are made of this".  Great write.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Saunni
Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777
West Virginia
9 posted 2004-11-04 01:32 AM


The imagery in this is beyond words! Excellent!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain.

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
10 posted 2004-11-04 05:13 AM


This is great! So full of romance and then of passion and then of cute humor. Glad I read this

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
11 posted 2004-11-04 07:33 PM


Thank you Sue...I love that song too.

Saunni I appreciate the time you took to read and comment on this piece. Thank you for such kind words.

Alyssa, thank you so much seeing the imagery nad reality combined in this. I appreciate your comments very much.


Eric

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