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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-10-31 09:59 AM

The night
our moon was surrounded

bleeding red

I was
by you

in the simplest form
of floating spheres,

and your own spill
of my substance

masked by leaves fallen to the sky
a rust of autumnal sacrifice.

Songs came back
from wherever they'd been

tides

joining the starlit murder
of a beautiful kind,

with her pull
she lifted stubborn eyes

and stole my feet

to watch her
alive

with blood on my hands.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2004-10-31 10:04 AM

and your own spill
of my substance

masked by leaves fallen to the sky
a rust of autumnal sacrifice.

Songs came back
from wherever they'd been

tides

joining the starlit murder
of a beautiful kind,

==================================
ooooohh this is so coooool

ethereal, mystical...haunting...
love the vivid, stark imagery...
so good to read ya gemma-girl.

Poetry is emotion put into measure.
The emotion comes by nature ...
but the measure is acquired by art.

Thomas Hardy

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

2 posted 2004-10-31 10:12 AM

Bravo! LOVE IT! This is abso(freakin')lutely brilliant!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2004-10-31 04:20 PM

Ahh YES, yes.. thank you!

and like JM said...
...ethereal, mystical...haunting...

into my library

Gem

Mxx

Oh, you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
My body aches to breathe your breath
Your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLaughlan~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-10-31 04:43 PM

Hauntingly realistic write Gem.
Much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2004-10-31 06:58 PM

wow, gemma, this one rocks!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-10-31 08:57 PM

gemma girl....*sigh*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2004-11-01 08:09 AM

always a pleasure to read you..

always

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2004-11-01 08:42 AM

joining the starlit murder
of a beautiful kind,

with her pull
she lifted stubborn eyes

and stole my feet

to watch her
alive

with blood on my hands.

wheww, tremendous visuals...always a pleasure to read you

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

9 posted 2004-11-01 09:19 AM

Very nice Gem,

A spare beauty.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2004-11-05 04:52 PM

had to come back and visit...

you are here so rarely it seems..

Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

11 posted 2004-11-06 11:15 AM

This is the first time I have read your work - what a treat.

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

12 posted 2004-11-06 01:22 PM

wow....what a gift. i'm a fan.

in the end it's not just you with your memories and your scars, fall on me if you ever forget how beautiful you are.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2004-11-06 02:15 PM

Where've you been young lady, i should give you a spanking..but then you'd probably enjoy it..actually I know i would..............what were we talking about?

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

14 posted 2004-11-07 12:24 PM

woah! this poem blew me away! awesome write!

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

15 posted 2004-11-07 09:25 PM

Sometimes I wonder if we could share the same stars ....

... now I know anything is possible ...

miss you too

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

16 posted 2004-11-07 09:47 PM

Beautiful.
TD

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

17 posted 2004-11-08 10:43 AM

deep and haunting gemjop...enjoyed much.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

18 posted 2004-11-08 12:15 PM

And you, Dear Gem Drop, spill words with the finest.

Good to read you again! Don't be such a stranger!

Loves 'n hugs,
LL

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

19 posted 2004-11-08 07:17 PM

This is stunning, Gem . . .
I wish I had penned these very words.

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