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Two Eyes Staring.....Dim
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Two Eyes Staring.....Dim |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Two dimes and a quarter, all that I had. No cigarettes or chewing gum, feeling outright sad. A cab won’t carry me, my feet will have to do. Even though I can see holes in both my shoes. My life is filled with emptiness from death and so much pain. Causing me much unrest, what’s there for me to gain. The coffee shop closed the door ‘cause I can’t pay my way. Their sneers I do deplore what can a broke man say? I broke the bottle yesterday that held my soul inside. How long can a drunk man stay on this coaster ride? I once was a man of God who practiced what he preached. Until one day when those tires howled loudly and screeched. A child of four was lying there, no life inside his chest. And from that time until now, a jail was my bed rest. For I can see those blank eyes that stared into my soul. And no God has heard my cries as empty bottles roll. And if my heart could replace that one I stole from them. That gift would still not erase those two eyes staring dim... Two eyes....staring dim. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This sounds so sad. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Oh, Barry! Your words touched deep inside my heart. So very sad was this wonderfully written piece. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gosh Barry...this one just aches!! Wonderfully penned. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Deep, painful writing. You told this story so realistically... I hurt for him in his sorrow. Amazing job, Barry. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
heart wrenching  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 dang |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I wonder who inspired this incredibly touching piece. A man's misery so powerfully rendered. Love, Margherita |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I am fortunate that this illness/disease has never been my nemisis. But there are tens of thousands, millions who live a life of chance every day...driving drunk, challenging the odds... If this causes one person to get help, then it is priceless poetry...For nothing can be more valuable... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
 Deserves to be read once more. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I felt this to the very core of me. A drunk driver cause the decapitation of my cousin and I am still haunted by it to this day. My wasband is a policeman and he has also shown me unforgetable police photos of the carnage wrought by drunk drivers. May your poem open the eyes of those whose eyes need to be opened! A highly moving piece of writing, my friend! Love & Light, Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah Barry - this one weeps. Not only for the sorrow of the death, but for the pain of the man. Alcoholism is a wicked task master that demands slavery and demise - I have seen the effects in my own circle and the valiant struggles of some to overcome their dependancy. What a mess it all causes for so many - very poignant dear Sir- Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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