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Dune |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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As far as the sand blows and the life, deserts know, there those that sail dune crests their ways mark old caravan trails. The wind that causes dunes to grow encourages me to go at life slow like the inexorable shift of cove sands it all lies in what the winds command... The creatures, they should adapt to shifts or be washed ashore as dead wood drifts; worms will continue to seek secret spice inhabit a planet where greed isn't nice... Those worms roamed beneath desert floors and raced to catch a spice at open doors. It was a mark of manhood to ride these creatures other worlds would appreciate desert life features.. all in and out of existence with shifted dunes I can recollect what thrived before the ruins. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-29-2004 12:18 AM).] |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
"The wind that causes dunes to grow encourages me to go at life slow like the inexorable shift of cove sands it all lies in what the winds command..." Wow, Martin, wow! I needed these words. This is my favorite of yours...saving it, thank you. K |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I first thought of my beach...beautiful white sand dunes (no longer there because of Ivan) but then I got more into what you were describing... very neat write Martin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"like the inexorable shift of cove sands it all lies in what the winds command..." Cool line, Martin. I remember that movie. After seeing it, I was hesitant to venture out onto the dunes, but only for a moment or two. You've reminded me of something I began writing about the Oregon sand dunes, one of which is threatening to swallow up a huge supermarket. LOL. Perhaps, it's time to finish that piece. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
From Guinness World Records quote: Your poem is a tribute to how easily things can get lost over time. Thank you, Sir. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Excellent! The Dune series is one of my favorite reads.I have read it many times over the years.Great writing, as usual. Jason |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I suppose the poem deserved a final tune-up in the last stanza...inspiration began with Hebert's land described in Dune...but it goes deeper to what dunes conceal... |
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