One Night Until Forever --- with Suthern

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James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-10-27 07:51 PM

      Suthern and I received a challenge recently,
      to write a poem as a role. The scene is,
      a couple late at night, at a back table in
      an anonymous bar, during World War 2.
      ....Here's the result, with my thanks to
      the lady for a beautiful evening....

        One Night Until Forever

I’ve come into the bar after
a long and tiring shift,
hoping that song and laughter
will give my spirits lift.

The shy smile upon your face
reveals a healing scar,
and in your eyes, I see a trace
of guilt for where you are.

            I don’t need a cigarette,
            and you don’t need a light,
            nothing from the kitchenette
            to hold us through the night.

            I used to love the beaches,
            but now I won't return
            where every phantom reaches
            and memories still burn.

You’re wondering why you were blessed
to walk away alive;
you feel a burning emptiness –
buddies did not survive.

            I have no expectation
            beyond what I can see;
            no time for contemplation
            of what may never be.

How I ache to ease your pain
if only for tonight.
If I don’t see you again
Loving still feels right.

            You have no inhibition
            for wine to wash away;
            and I don’t need permission
            for what I’m going to say.

Perhaps somehow a trace of peace
we’ll find in midst of hell;
any doubts are silenced, ceased
I submit to your spell.

            We won’t plan for tomorrow,
            but we can share today
            the joy we’ll steal or borrow
            from a world in disarray.

The bar seems to disappear
it’s you and I, alone.
A song is crooned, you lean near
as I emit a moan

My eyes seek answers from you
and though there’s not a sound
I know one thing to be true:
this is real love we’ve found

            Your eyes ask me a question
            I don’t dare answer now.
            “Yes” is my concession;
            somehow it is a vow.

            I closed my eyes to life there
            but my death wasn't due;
            carried from the strife there,
            I‘ve opened them to you.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-10-27 08:38 PM

Oh My Go....
the tears won't stop...

Is there a place where two can publish one poem?

Or is the moon pulling on my heartstrings?

Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2004-10-27 08:41 PM

I'm with Kari on this one....
what beauty......

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 2004-10-27 09:59 PM

what a beautiful duet

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-10-27 10:08 PM

A fantastic duet!!!
By far one of the best I have read here at Passions!
~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Martie

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5 posted 2004-10-27 11:38 PM

Jamie and Ruth...A wonderful duet...very heart touching and real. Hugs to you both.

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2004-10-28 08:12 AM

Perhaps somehow a trace of peace
we’ll find in midst of hell;
any doubts are silenced, ceased
I submit to your spell.

            We won’t plan for tomorrow,
            but we can share today
            the joy we’ll steal or borrow
            from a world in disarray.

==========================================

A lovely blending of talent, creating such a bittersweet beauty....love the clever theme and  creative flashback to another time, putting the unique spin on the duet.
Me thinks this could be a series....yes?

Very cool poets Ruth & James!!

Ink runs from the corners of my mouth.
There is no happiness like mine ...
I've been eating poetry.

Mark Strand

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2004-10-28 08:20 AM

Ruth & James,
One hell of a write, you two are great.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2004-10-28 08:43 AM

Wow..exceptionally romantic, with quality and elegance singing all the way through
Your both very very good together!
Bravo!

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

9 posted 2004-10-28 09:22 AM

I am still caught up in the spell of your spun magic and am unable to write a coherent reply...

passing shadows
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displaced

10 posted 2004-10-28 09:24 AM

awesome write!

suthern

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Louisiana

11 posted 2004-10-28 01:04 PM

My heartfelt thanks to all of you... your kind responses are so very much appreciated! *S*

Jamie... I don't know how you put up with my angsts and anxieties... but I'm so very grateful you did. *S* Working with you was an honor... you make my words look so good (though I still like yours better. LOL) Thank you, my friend... in spite of my fears, I wouldn't have missed it for the world. *S*

James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

12 posted 2004-10-28 02:39 PM

It was a pleasure, and in spite of our Suthern lady's modesty, an equal partnership....

Thank you, dear lady....and a special thank-you to the one who designed the challenge for us....who I won't name here because I don't have permission, but want to thank her anyway.

~~J

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

13 posted 2004-10-28 08:56 PM

SweetSuthern & SweetJaime~

Six reads ... six sighs~

Loving artful expression becomes the two of you a whole bunch-a-lot~

*SIGH* (#7)
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Magnus

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14 posted 2004-10-28 09:20 PM

I am not one to sigh often...but dang, this
is good...very good, and I did....

A very well done to both of you...

MGROVES

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15 posted 2004-10-29 01:24 AM

tears of joy, simply beautifull

Dark Angel
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16 posted 2004-10-29 05:48 AM

An absolutely wonderful duet, a lovely blending.

Thank you.

Maree

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2004-10-29 11:27 AM

not done with this one yet...
nope nope noppers

such a unique take on the dueting idea...
so?
where the sequel?

Poetry is emotion put into measure.
The emotion comes by nature ...
but the measure is acquired by art.

Thomas Hardy

James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

18 posted 2004-10-29 11:48 AM

so?
where the sequel?

Heh-heh-heh.....A written sequel?? What a novel idea......!

~~J

suthern

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Louisiana

19 posted 2004-11-03 02:40 AM

I am doubly blessed... First, I got to mingle words with one of this world's finest poets, then... all of you received our work so kindly... I thank you so very much!!

Marsha

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20 posted 2004-11-21 06:50 AM

James darling man and Suthern beloved one, Oh how special is this, the pair of you write utterly totally beautiful lines that caresses my soul with pure wonder. I find this piece utterly amazing, so perfectly presented, the words dropping into my soul like jewels of crystal clarity. An excellent poem, and more than an truly beautiful collaboration. You two should be proud of this gem, I know I feel privileged to have read it
Love you always
and forever
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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21 posted 2004-11-21 05:33 PM

You two make a great team! I love this!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

suthern

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22 posted 2004-11-22 05:32 PM

Marsha: I am proud of it... and so grateful to Jamie for giving me the opportunity to write with him. Thank you very much, my friend... I'm so glad you like! *S*

Alli: I couldn't have asked for a better... or more patient... partner. *S* Thank you so very much! *S*

suthern

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23 posted 2004-12-07 01:02 PM

Even though thoughts of the European front were in my mind as we wrote this, I hope everyone will indulge me for revisiting it today... on the anniversary of the day of infamy that led to the landings on those beaches.

For I cannot and would not want to forget all those lives of then... or all the ones that are being forever changed at this very moment.

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